SPN fic! - Follower - Teen Sam, Dean and John

[eloise_bright]

I wrote fic! It's been so long - I've been working on this for a couple of weeks, in between working on school stuff. Now I have to get my head around my Sweet Charity fic. Wish me luck..

TITLE: Follower
RATING: PG13 (gen)
CHARACTERS: Teen Sam, Dean and John
DISCLAIMERS: Not my boys
NOTES: 2300 words. Set pre-series. Sam hates training.

Comments

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. Sam was fun to write in this. Just the ultimate brooding teen. Nothing John or Dean can do will make this right for him.

[iamstealthyone]

Ow.

Great job capturing the disconnect Sam feels from the rest of his family. I ached for him throughout this piece, particularly at the end. Also, I like that you didn’t leave things on a light note, that despite what Dean does, Sam still feels like an outsider. It feels very true to life.

Favorite lines:

They’re almost done; four circuits round the edge of the lake, Dad had decreed. As a cool down, boys.

*shakes head* He can be such a hardass.

He lurches to the left, his feet tangling in a weird uncoordinated rhythm, but somehow he manages to remain upright. It doesn’t matter; he can still hear the unspoken disappointment in Dad’s quiet sigh.

Moments like this, I want to smack John.

Last time he’d smarted off during training, he’d ended up doing push-ups until his arms gave out and he’d fallen face first into the dirt.

*winces*

Sam understands that maybe it is fun if you always get it right. If you always win. If you’re stronger and faster and better than Sam knows he can ever be.

Oh, Sam. It hurts that he feels like

[eloise_bright]

Thank you! I was very aware as I wrote this that there could not be a neat or glib ending. I imagined Sam went through a period of idolizing John and Dean, when he initially found out about hunting, but then as he grew older, and was perhaps not as good at training at Dean, he began to disconnect from the hunting life.

Perhaps being sheltered from hunting early in his life made him less comfortable with it as he grew older.

[iamstealthyone]

Perhaps being sheltered from hunting early in his life made him less comfortable with it as he grew older.

I hadn't thought of that before, but it makes sense. It's a huge change to go from fairly normal to being right in the middle of hunting. *hugs Sam*

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. I wanted to avoid a neat resolution, and leave things messy and complicated. Like real life *g*

[dotfic]

Oh, I love this, with the close Sam-pov. There's a lot of crunchy pov stuff in this. How John and Dean come across through his eyes, love and resentment mixed. My heart ached for Sam on that ending.

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. It was tricky, maintaining that tight teen Sam POV. He loves his dad and brother, but he just can't understand their love of training and hunting.

[flawsrevenge]

Makes me want to go swimming, although searching around for something at the bottom of a lake? Not so much. Fun to read about though. Liked the imagery. And poor poor Sammy. Thanks for this!

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. I enjoyed writing the underwater sequences in this, imagining the boys swimming through the shadowy waters. Glad you enjoyed it!