SPN fic! - Follower - Teen Sam, Dean and John

[eloise_bright]

I wrote fic! It's been so long - I've been working on this for a couple of weeks, in between working on school stuff. Now I have to get my head around my Sweet Charity fic. Wish me luck..

TITLE: Follower
RATING: PG13 (gen)
CHARACTERS: Teen Sam, Dean and John
DISCLAIMERS: Not my boys
NOTES: 2300 words. Set pre-series. Sam hates training.

Comments

[tsuki_no_bara]

poor sammy. i really like his relationship with dean and dad, how outside them he feels and how dean tries to help him. he's very convincingly a teenage younger brother.

and Dad steps forward and Dean’s swallowed up by his shadow is very, very telling.

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. You picked my favourite line from this. The idea of Dean in John's shadow makes my angsty heart happy.

[thevulgarvirgin]

*sob*

Oh it has it's moments of me grinning somewhat, but mostly poor Sammy.

You kick ass at the torment of emotions Sam goes through.

I love it when you make me hurt :)

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. I felt sorry for all three of them in, because John and Dean have no real idea how much Sam dislikes the training. And he just closes up and becomes even more disconnected from them.

[erinrua]

Oh, Sam. Don't worry, it'll come.

And yeah. Now you've got to give us Sam at say, 17, when he's beating Dean at stuff just to prove he can. *g*

Anyhow, thanks for this. Very vibrant, lovely undercurrent of brother-ness, loved the love when Dean gave Sam the coin. Yeah. Achy but excellent.
Cheers ~

Erin

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. Love the idea of an older teenaged Sam, finally beating Dean at running. And still being pissed off at the whole training thing *g*

[erinrua]

*pets cute little plot bunny: nudges it in your direction* :-D

[blackcat333_99]

You do such a fantastic job of hitting the right notes of the teenage years, compounded by John's parenting techniques, and the whole sibling rivalry/bond thing. My heart hurts just a little.

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. I was the opposite of Sam as a teen - a horribly obedient older sibling who never rebelled. My poor parents didn't know what hit them when my sis turned thirteen. *g*

[saberivojo]

Poor Sam. The easy comfortable relationship between John and Dean is just something that looks like it is going to happen.

"Dad and Dean would have to come searching for him, and all they’d find was his bloated corpse and then they’d be sorry…"

That made me grin, because I remember feeling like that at Sam's age. Not so much that water sprites were going to drown me but "if I fell out the window...they'd be sorry. Or if I got kidnapped they'd be sorry.." I think that is universal to kids. Maybe even Dean sometimes huh?

Great job.

[eloise_bright]

Thanks! Oh, I remember very well thinking exactly the same thing - then they'll be sorry...

Poor wee Sam - he's so on the outside when he sees how easily Dad and Dean work together as a team.