Asylum_spnfic - In God's Eyes - PG13. John POV

[eloise_bright]

Fic! This was written for asylum_spnfics. I am attempting to write other fic, but my body is demanding sleep. Stupid body. *grumbles*

TITLE: In God’s Eyes
RATING: PG13 gen
CHARACTERS: John, Dean, Sam and Bobby
DISCLAIMER: Not my boys
NOTES: 1640 words. Written for mara_sho’s prompt: ‘Dean gets the Impala. How?’ Beta magic worked by yasminke. Title and quote from ‘Rusty Cage’

Comments

[iamstealthyone]

Nicely done. Good blend of sullen Sam, awesome big brother Dean, and complex John. John shows both tenderness and a kind of cruelty toward Dean in this piece, appreciating Dean’s best traits while also doing what he can to trap Dean into the hunting lifestyle. It makes the gift so, so bittersweet. Nifty take on it, btw, on the car being about far more than just an “atta boy.”

Favorite lines:

“Your brother wears jeans,” John had pointed out, which hadn’t helped his case any.

Yeah, Sam’s definitely not in the frame of mind for comparisons to Dean at this point.

But when he’d heard the warmth in that coach’s voice, the pride the man had in Dean, for just a moment John wished desperately that he’d been there to see his boy win.

Aww. :)

Dean finished his last set of push-ups a while back, but he’s still over beside Sammy, faking like he’s got another couple of sets to go.

*pets Dean*

teeth bright-white against his dust-smudged cheeks.

Good detail.

In giving Dean the Impala, he’s effectively locking the cage and throwing away the

[eloise_bright]

Thank you! I don't think I ever believed that John just gave Dean the car without thinking very hard about what he was doing. I just loved the idea of it being a gift and a noose around Dean's neck.

Sullen Sam is my most favourite Sam of all. He's such fun to bounce off bastard!John and then along comes awesome big bro Dean to save the day *grins stupidly*

[jorma_duran]

Oh wow! This is really quite youchie because I think this really could have been what happened. John might have seen the effect that giving the impala to Dean would have, and gone through with it anyway. Or even gone through with it because of the effect it would have.

But he might also have just given a gift, with pure intentions, never really realizing that he is effectively locking the cage and throwing away the key.

I loved the contrast of Sam's loud, put-upon demeanor against Dean's easy-going, under the radar way of being.

And John's aching to know his son the way Dean's coach did, really stood out to me.

Oh boys.

Thanks so much for sharing.

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. I like the idea of John's motives for giving him the car being pure, and then him realising later what he's done. Ah, the angst *g*

Sammy is such fun to write when he's being a wonderfully sullen pain in the ass teenager.

[fates3]

oh, awesome story!!! I love it :D

[eloise_bright]

Thank you!

[penfold_x]

Wow. This is one of those stories that sneaks up on you and kneecaps you with the pain. Your Bobby is especially excellent! I love how nothing gets by him. Even when he's cracking wise five minutes before, he's taking in every detail and making sure John makes his decisions consciously. Very true to his character. Your feel for just the right level of detail here is also amazing. Thanks!!

[eloise_bright]

Thank you. I'm always nervous writing Bobby, as we get a very clear idea of his character on the show, and Jim plays him with great subtlety. I'm glad his character rang true for you.

[hansbekhart]

God, that's so sad. That's exactly the way I can see it going down.

[eloise_bright]

Thanks. I almost hope it wasn't like this.