Fic: Made a Mistake, Kissed a Snake (How Many Doctors Will It Take?)

[elsiesnuffin]

Title: Made a Mistake, Kissed a Snake (How Many Doctors Will It Take?)
Spoilers: ‘Paradigms of Human Memory’ I guess
Word Count: 4057
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I have nothing. Dan has it all.
Summary: A Jump-A-Thon? At Greendale, what else would you expect?

AN: This was written for midtega  who prompted on the ‘Ficcy Friday’ thread that he wanted a backstory

Comments

[midtega]

That was awesome. That felt like a real life episode. Seriously thanks for keeping my suggestion in mind, cuz I loved the jump rope moment and that look was pure affection from both parts. Therefore it was complete BS jeff denied it, but still as you clearly demonstrated over this fic jeff can't completely deny those blue eyes. Seriously though, I offer my sincerest gratitude that you did this. I love that you had each and every character be in character, and I love the twisted ending you gave that jeff doesn't know how to double dutch but came anyway. That made the moment just much sweeter.

Once again, thanks for doing this. I'm sorry if it caused you problems, cuz you said in the a/n it was kinda hard, but you are a talented writer so I have complete faith in you. Just thank you and keep doing that engaging italy fic. ;)

[elsiesnuffin]

It wasn't hard to write, just hard to figure a moment that wouldnt really be a moment. We already knew that it had to be something that she didn't cite as an example of a JA thing, so it was just difficult to find that 'thing'. And believe me, it was sooo much fun to write. Besides the shark hunting and the sanitarium, the jump roping was the thing I most wanted to see expanded from that episode. Way to go with the awesome prompt! Thanks for reading!

[treblebeth]

This is awesome. I love the way you handled J/B. That is exactly how I see it working out. It all fit together really well.

[elsiesnuffin]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!

[fangirl_101]

Damn you, Pierce!! *shakes fist angrily* They were gonna kiss!

I just loved this. So adorably fun and cute. Jeff's inner dialogue and reluctance throughout was terrific. Yes again, another knockout awesome fic from you :D How did we get so lucky?

[elsiesnuffin]

As, that's so nice of you to say. If people keep giving awesome prompts, I'll keep writing them. Thank you for reading! B

[supercapo]

This is like a bajillion times better than what I would have done. So I'm glad you did it! And yes, the Jump Rope seen was the best part of the montage... well maybe rivaled by Boobitron.

You wrote the way they were about to kiss so naturally. I loved how not forced it felt or anything like that. Just about as perfect a fic as you could get.

[elsiesnuffin]

I seriously watched that episode like 4 times before I even understood that was Boobatron. Lame, huh?

I wanted the almost kiss to be as subtle as possible. At the end of the Poli-Sci ep, the same thing happens. He's LOOKING at her and then Pierce interrupts them. But now I basically just said that I ripped the whole thing off. Hmmm.

Thank you so much for reading!

[thegrin]

This was so damn awesome, just so you know... this is now canon for me. ;)
I love that even when he tries Jeff can't resist Annie's disney face, it's like his kryptonite lol ! It's ironic that he doesn't want to help her but he can't help but feel irritated that she didn't ask him first , it's so .... Jeff !
I also love the subtlety of the last scene, how you can tell that they were about to kiss ... it wasn't over the top and you wrote it perfectly !
This oneshot was amazing, I hope to read more from you because I always get so excited when I see that you posted something lol
In other words, thanks so much for sharing ♥

[elsiesnuffin]

Thank you for reading! I needed to be pretty light with everything, since it had to fit into canon. I mean, I couldn't just randomly kill anyone off. I'm so glad you liked this.