LJ Idol Season 11: Week 22 - Hiraeth

[encrefloue]

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Come here.

Yes, right in the center.

Watch your step.

Don’t get snagged along the walls.

There. Do you feel that?

No?

Hm.

Oh, take off your flag.

Okay, how about now?

Not yet?

Your tongue-

scrub the language off of it.

No? Still nothing?

Well then, take off your skin.

Yeah, just take it off.

No, it’ll be fine.

I promise.

I promise!

Comments

[bleodswean]

Yowza! This is intense and brilliantly well done. It feels like an invitation.

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much! Happy that it could prompt a strong reaction and leave an opening.

[rayaso]

"Your tongue- / scrub the language off of it" is such an amazing line. This was a wonderful.

[dadi]

That was the part that fascinated me too!

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much! I had a lot of doubt about that line, actually, and eventually the internal editor let it be. So glad you found that it was not just passable, but successful!

[marlawentmad]

I enjoyed this surreal one-sided dialogue.

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much! I really enjoy your work with crafting surreal imagery, so I truly appreciate that.

[viagra]

You freak me out sometimes in the absolute best way.

[encrefloue]

Oh my gosh, I love this comment so much. Thank you!!

[adoptedwriter]

Thought-provoking and creative.

[encrefloue]

Thank you-I'm so glad you thought so!