LJ Idol Season 11: Week 24 - "I'm the Usain Bolt of running away from my problems."

[encrefloue]

My intersection partner this week is the exceptional marlawentmad. Please read her wondrous entry first!

Young one,

they cast eyes

weighted with tackle

and hooks

upon you,

that they might lure

and catch you

with their lines.

They fed you

that story

of Icarus,

and oh,

did it sink you-

“Don’t fly

too close

to the sun,”

came their bait,

heavy

and gaudily clothed

in transparent

Comments

[viagra]

WOW!

I've gotta say, this is pretty much what I expected from a partnership between the two of you, and boy was I ever excited to read these pieces together. You and marlawentmad have such a way with words; you, particularly, also have such a nice visual component to your pieces, and this is no exception. The way the lines work with each other, undulating, I really like letting them just wash over me and taking it all in as one piece.

As always, excellent job!

[encrefloue]

It was such a pleasure to explore the transformational imagery of marlawentmad's universe. I'm thrilled that the sensations of the piece could come across in waves. Thank you so much for your kind praise!

[bleodswean]

WHOA!

This is utterly brilliant and captivating and I'm going to go read it again. And again. And again.

[encrefloue]

Knowing that a reader wants to dive right back in and reread is one of the highest compliments. I'm deeply grateful to hear that you feel that way! Thank you!

[m_malcontent]

Yep, got my vote, nicely done

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the support.

[roina_arwen]

Very lovely. With all the water imagery, I’m curious if you chose “sole” (instead of “soul”) on purpose?

[encrefloue]

Thank you very much! Yes, it was intentional: it is the sole of her foot.

[roina_arwen]

Ah! Okay. It confused me because I thought of the fish, then I thought “shouldn’t it be soul?”

I guess if I had meant that part of the foot, I would have used “soles” to reference both feet (figuring that both would be facing the horizon). But that’s just me. 😉

[encrefloue]

Sure, the confusion is understandable! I chose "sole" here because she deliberately placed one foot upon the horizon. One chosen step upon the horizon makes it feel more like a dance than passively standing. Just how I imagined marlawentmad's divine entity dancer moving about time and space.

[rayaso]

Outstanding! Intersecting stories is hard, but intersecting poems like this must be so difficult.

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much! The hardest part was finding a concept, but after that things actually flowed quite easily between us.