LJ Idol Season 11: Week 25 - The Catbird's Seat

[encrefloue]

The despotic Florida sun was almost as cruel a welcome as Roy’s gambit:

“Why are you so cold?”

With a neck craning towards the unlucky blades of grass that bore the stain of the 30 yard line (such that the small lump of his chin sat feebly upon pillowy tiers of fat), yet with dispassionate eyes cast up, tucked just under the awning of a brow

Comments

[rayaso]

Is this your first prose this year? You should write more. Your skills as a poet were evident -- it was so rich! Great work.

[karmasoup]

I played the french horn back in my school days, and one of my brothers was a drum major (though he was 5 years older than me and went to a different school), so I can relate to some of this, but I managed to skip having to deal with marching band... I was in 6 different concert choirs, though! Fortunately, vocal performance conditions were not nearly as challenging, weather-wise (though there were some heated moments in the wings of our musical theater on more than one occasion!) ;-)

[d0gs]

I really loved this! Your prose is as lovely as your poetry <3 Those last two lines were perfect!

[kittenboo]

Well done, so descriptive!

[flipflop_diva]

I also did not expect prose from you, and had to double-check I was reading the right thing! But this could almost be poetry in the way that it's written - it's so evocative and beautiful, and I love the ending and how he finally has a place. It's lovely!