"Of course. I couldn't be arsed to ask anyone else to do it, they wouldn't have done it right."
I'm going to take a guess and say you're not English? As I am and that sentence doesn't quite parse?
"I couldn't be arsed" means "I couldn't be bothered to/I was too lazy to".
I suspect that you were more trying to imply that he daren't ask anyone else, and if so that's not quite right.
Just a minor thing, but brought up up as otherwise your slang is pretty good (and poor you for having to deal with Dick Van Dyke Axl Whoeverheis on Shiny. LOL, he sounds about as English as a pair of chopsticks compared to your guy.)
Ha ha ha, that's what I get for posting at five AM while a little buzzed. But yes, not English-- more of a drunk American, really, but thanks for pointing that out, as I know I've still got some work to do!
(Also, in the best interests of the mun, might I ask how one could improve that East End slang? That is what that Axl is shooting for, and I'd like more concrete criticism other than, "He sounds like Bert from Mary Poppins." Is it, perhaps, that the rhyming slang's a bit much?)
Well like I said, your slang and speech patterns were pretty convincing other than that one, which is the only reason I pointed it out - I'm guessing there's plenty of work gone into it to get to that standard so may as well aim for the 100% XD
Eh, I wouldn't even know where to start with the Axl guy. Hell, I'm English and I'd be wary of trying to sound East End myself. Also I don't know the character - maybe he talks like that in canon. But generally rhyming slang should be used only in moderation and with more variety. There are some nice cultural references in there - Kathy Burke, for example. But probably, if that was used here, the speaker would just say "Kathy". The best advice I can give is to use it sparingly and rely more on contractions and dropping H's and so forth, which are easier to replicate in writing. If she can find some genuine Cockney speech online that would probably help (audio, I mean). Personally I try to avoid replicating dialect idioms in writing - even the ones from Yorkshire, which is my own native dialect
Absolutely-- my perfectionist streak won't be satisfied with just 95% top-notch!
Ah, yes, that is good advice, indeed. I thought as much but simply wanted to be certain, and why not gather material from the source? (And yeesh at the Yorkshire. I can only imagine the difficulty in trying to replicate that!)
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I'm going to take a guess and say you're not English? As I am and that sentence doesn't quite parse?
"I couldn't be arsed" means "I couldn't be bothered to/I was too lazy to".
I suspect that you were more trying to imply that he daren't ask anyone else, and if so that's not quite right.
Just a minor thing, but brought up up as otherwise your slang is pretty good (and poor you for having to deal with Dick Van Dyke Axl Whoeverheis on Shiny. LOL, he sounds about as English as a pair of chopsticks compared to your guy.)
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(Also, in the best interests of the mun, might I ask how one could improve that East End slang? That is what that Axl is shooting for, and I'd like more concrete criticism other than, "He sounds like Bert from Mary Poppins." Is it, perhaps, that the rhyming slang's a bit much?)
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Eh, I wouldn't even know where to start with the Axl guy. Hell, I'm English and I'd be wary of trying to sound East End myself. Also I don't know the character - maybe he talks like that in canon. But generally rhyming slang should be used only in moderation and with more variety. There are some nice cultural references in there - Kathy Burke, for example. But probably, if that was used here, the speaker would just say "Kathy". The best advice I can give is to use it sparingly and rely more on contractions and dropping H's and so forth, which are easier to replicate in writing. If she can find some genuine Cockney speech online that would probably help (audio, I mean). Personally I try to avoid replicating dialect idioms in writing - even the ones from Yorkshire, which is my own native dialect
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Ah, yes, that is good advice, indeed. I thought as much but simply wanted to be certain, and why not gather material from the source? (And yeesh at the Yorkshire. I can only imagine the difficulty in trying to replicate that!)
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