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Naruto, [doujutsu]: "Kagome, Kagome" (Neji/Hinata)

Oct 25, 2006 06:00

SUDDEN BURST OF CREATIVE WRITING URGE.

Title: Kagome, Kagome
Author: Lorelei DiAngelo (to all you faps who still call me "Demi" :P)
Rating: Uh...hard PG-13 for allusions to sex/b00bies? O.o I hate writing things other than porn, 'cuz then you can't tell what rating to give it.
Pairing: Neji/Hinata. For the win/lose. I can't decide which. But I ( Read more... )

Comments 24

lykomancer October 25 2006, 06:36:27 UTC

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Preeeeeeetty.

Man, Demi Lori, you really can pack a punch sometimes, you know that right? I think the sort segments and sentences worked crazily well for this, as did the strikingly stark imagery-- the whole fic comes off as "white" somehow, if that makes sense. Pure and cold/cool and with that subtle uncomfortableness for much of the fic that the color gives off sometimes...but it warms up by the end, and it's still pretty.

kill_me_faster October 25 2006, 15:33:12 UTC

I actually love this more than anything I have ever written in the world save...two/three random fics that no one remembers. I'll probably make some sort of post when I get home from work tonight illustrating why, but I'm sure no one will care.

ANYWAY. I'm glad you liked this. ^___^;; Though *I* liked it, I was unsure how it would come off to other people. Ah, it just came so naturally to me that I was happy~. ♥ I wonder if that means that I'm getting my writing touch back.

*PLEASED*

I love you. I hope your Lee/Gaara porn is as good, though I don't think I'll be able to post it until around Friday of next week because I am SO LAME WITH BUSY and also started it on the laptop. Which means I have to use the public library computer to post it because THE LAPTOP IS FUNKY AND DOES THINGS TO .TXT DOCUMENTS. O.o That apparently my desktop computer cannot comprehend.

It's like trying to fit a square peg into a round hole or something.

...what am I talking about???

scorpio_kym October 26 2006, 04:34:43 UTC

Ah, I'm glad you gave it a happy ending. ^_^ It's so sweet, but still a little sad as it is... It think it's just right! ;D Good job! ♥♥♥

youkofujima October 26 2006, 06:14:29 UTC

Pretty X333 I really like this, cuz it's just so tense and fragile but strangely pretty. I guess it's like holding a glass snowflake in your hands or something. I personally really like the idea of Neji/Hinata, too (though, a loooooooooong time ago, I drew Gaara/Hinata).

can'twaittillyoureadjojoandwritesomething

lovely even if it was not what you intended anonymous October 26 2006, 07:18:16 UTC

very nicely written with some beautiful imagery. I agree with another reviewer about how it seems "white" somehow. perhaps the pure emotion or the simple images and their shadows. i haven't wrtten much, but the few pieces i have always end up with different endings then i expect. you definately do not "suck" :) thanks for sharing this

gracemis

juliagulia1017 October 26 2006, 13:23:53 UTC

i had to store this one in my memories- i thought it was absolutely beautiful. at times i found myself choking on tears.

love that it was done in neji's p.o.v- and maybe i enjoyed it because neji was actually being sensitive to his hinata's feelings.

just... just... wow.

and, um... hinataboobiesforthewin!!!

*dashes off*