"Another Man's Shoes" (4/4)

Feb 25, 2010 14:03

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stella_pegasi February 26 2010, 03:51:59 UTC
Really enjoyed this; fascinating to see Sheppard's reactions to the experiences he had. Your portrayal of Carson was great; the kind, concerned, and "cheeky bugger" we all love. He is fun to write, isn't he?

Great story!

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everybetty March 17 2010, 03:50:30 UTC
I do love writing Carson. He's so sweet with his wee lil turtles, but he's a scrapper when he's defending his friends. Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it :)

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titan5 February 26 2010, 04:53:58 UTC
Magnificent! The snarking between John and Rodney and between Rodney and Carson was great! I loved seeing John being held captive on an emotional roller coaster. The descriptions were awesome, both of the physical and emotional things going on. LOVED Carson's role and his own insecurities about being a clone. This was fabulous!!

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everybetty March 17 2010, 03:53:07 UTC
Thanks, J. You know I love my snark :) Roller coaster... like that too. From and earlier comment I got a pinball image. They both fit well. And I was so happy I could work some Carson love in as well. Thank you!

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sholio February 26 2010, 07:01:57 UTC
This was really enjoyable! :) Very interesting solution that they came up with, and I liked the recognition of John and Teyla's shared experience with the other presence in their mind. Actually, they should probably start a support group for that. *g*

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everybetty March 17 2010, 03:57:02 UTC
Hi, group. My name is John and I see dead people. LOL.

Thanks for the kind words. And I'm glad the connection I made between John and Teyla worked.

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tridget February 26 2010, 07:23:18 UTC
Ahhhhhh, this was so right. I loved the use of the Allorans and the scenes from their lives, playing themselves out in John's mind. The scenario worked so well for the sort of emotional struggle I had in mind when I wrote the prompt ( ... )

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everybetty March 17 2010, 04:07:50 UTC
Between this and your lovely email, I guess I can accept that you really liked it :) I really and truly wanted this to be super-special, R. You really did such a bang-up job with the pix. I was so pleased when I 'pulled' your name... and then I kinda face-planted on the delivery of the original prompt. I am VERY glad to hear this was ultimately what you had hoped for. I enjoyed the CHALLENGE (oy, was it a challenge :)) but it was all worth it if you enjoyed it. Your feedback was all the gratitude I needed. Thanks!!

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tepring February 26 2010, 22:35:57 UTC
Yay! I really enjoyed this, you have such a comfortable voice that just lets you settle in and read and get right to the good stuff. And speaking of the good stuff:

I loved the inside jokes and those homages that just made it feel so Atlantis. (and SG-1, loved the Jackson ascension thing, heh) I miss it terribly ;-)

John was terribly in character throughout, and I think it was that tension between the recognizable hero we love and the emotion being wrung out of him that made the whole thing work. For some reason, the whole dead son thing was just really...whumpy (in all the tummy butterflies sense of the word), without being lugubrious. Better in fact than an actual son and actual death because then it's TOO sad! Cake? Eat it too? Yes, please.

I loved how Morla kept returning and getting scarier with each appearance. I could have seen more of him even! He was a great "nasty" and gave the plot some weight beyond the physical/mental risks.

I could go on. Thanks for posting! Really enjoyed it.

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everybetty March 17 2010, 04:04:38 UTC
Thanks for the great feedback, T. I tried to put in all the things I loved about the show, like the inside jokes and nods to canon and SG1 ~ I miss it too :(

Morla was FUN to write - best time with a baddy I've had. He was a real scene chewer :)

Thank you and your tummy butterflies :)

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