How's my writing?

[evilbo]

I've been lazy lately and not replying to games as well as I should be, but I still want to know -

How's my writing?

Anonymous comments are allowed, so go nuts. Is there anything about my writing you like or dislike? Am I too concise or too wordy? Do I have the characterization wrong for anyone I've written, including characters in one-shot

Comments

[roymustangtaisa]

Your Fuery, in all of two read posts (the audition, and the preparation to call home), in the words of Akiha Tohno, makes me want to do something to him. He's low key appropriately, and I want to see interaction with him ASAP. As soon as Roy is finished attempting to worm his way out of plot related events with Ed, if no one else has jumped all over Fuery, I shall assault you with play.

[evilbo]

EEK A STALKER - no, actually, I'm glad to hear feedback on Fuery. I've never played him seriously before joining this game, so it's a relief to know I've got his personality down.

...plus, I *love* playing shy characters. I'm really looking forward to Roy bugging him.

[roymustangtaisa]

I look forward to what will happen to him surrounded by boisterous, extraverted Armstrong family members.

I see you've a Dream Carnival icon. Nice!

If I recall, you're also a fan of Scar; in the Ed and Al team scenario, it ends with Scar going soft over a kitten ("...Nyan." ), when Al builds a local cat house (*pauses for double entendre laugh*). Also, Hughes assaults Scar with pictures of Elycia in the Hughes and Armstrong scenario. For some reason, in every scenario but the Al and Greed one, Scar has teamed up with Greed... yes, the game is riddled with continuity questions, and is pure crack, but it provides us with a lineup of every military uniform wearing female (even Hughes's honey-blonde unnamed secretary) in miniskirts therefore, I approve. I whole heartedly approve.

[evilbo]

I also have something in mind involving Fuery's crazy uncle, so needless to say his decision to go is going to be a mistake~

I heard about the ending with Scar and the kitten, but I had no idea about the rest! Now why the heck didn't they release that in America? That sort of crack is very much Do Want.

[roymustangtaisa]

On a related note, a post made in which you can actually take part in the game now! As per wishes, Roy shall soon be bugging him. Or attempting to use him as an excuse to avoid the affair.

[roymustangtaisa]

Heads up that the game is active again, with Hughes approaching Fuery and Roy's location. I'm overseas and may be responding more slowly, but thank you for your patience with the slow moving game thus far!

[evilbo]

Oh, good to hear! I might try to get in a reply to that thread soon, but I've been swamped myself with schoolwork. I'll be keeping an eye on the game regardless.

[roymustangtaisa]

Yosh, looking forward to it! I feel for you on the being busy bit. x-x In Japan now, I'm hardly ever on during 'reasonable' hours... and the keyboard makes typing awkward and weird, slowing me down considerably... still, musn't abandon the game!