upturned rapture

[eyealtering]

a movement almost done;
it hovers, a hummingbird
dripping with nectar--
how the senses fill and
overfill and overflow;
i am yet undone,
my inner breath waiting,
waiting with exquisite agony--

come and find what is lost
when we close our eyes
and forget to breathe from inside
out

an upturned rapture.

Comments

[wytchcroft]

i love the slight sense of riddling to this actually;
i mean e.g.
//overfill and overflow;
i am yet undone,//

//come and find what is lost//

you put the lure in alluring! :)) x x

[eyealtering]

Hmm. 'Lure' and 'alluring' are such great words, you have me thinking ... :)

::Bows to the gentleman::

Thank you, thank you, I try! :)) x x

[wytchcroft]

an effort m'lady, for which we are suitably grateful :))

*doffs hat*

xx

[eyealtering]

Ah, your loveliness will go right to my head. ;)

xx

[eyealtering]

I have been inspired -- by you and wytchie -- or maybe even my self-imposed poetry boycott.

Thank you, darling friend. You make it worthwhile.

xoXO

[bennybunny]

Love the hummingbird imagery and that last line.

[eyealtering]

Thank you for letting me know which parts appealed to you the most.

[heartonbroadway]

that last line, my dear. that last line. x

[eyealtering]

Thank you, kindly. :) x