a kiss of remembrance

[eyealtering]

you ripped my mouth in a
kiss
and i bled for all
my mind to see
for my heart to
acknowledge as the end
of my frozen place.

Comments

[bennybunny]

'my mind to see
for my heart to'

Particularly liked this, but the weight on the ending is perfect. Swift and merciless.

[eyealtering]

Hmm. It's interesting how this poemlet has been received, both on lj and beyond. Merciless is an interesting description.

This was meant as a 'positive' poem.

Thank you for particularly enjoying those lines. Appreciate it.