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Fic: The Stars Blindly Run - Chapter 2

Apr 21, 2011 11:04

Title: The Stars Blindly Run, Chapter 2
Previous Chapters: 1
Characters/Pairings: Anders, F!Hawke, Carver, Varric with eventual Hawke/Anders
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 4657
Summary: Anders does not think that he will ever return to the Deep Roads, but, then, there are lot of things that he doesn't think he'll ever do again. In this chapter, the team ( Read more... )

character: hawke, dragon age, character: anders, fanfiction

Comments 12

middlemarching April 21 2011, 18:26:50 UTC

“Eh.” Anders has that odd, distant smile on his lips as he allows the healing magic to fade. “I'm just lucky enough to get out of bad situations for awhile, but not lucky enough to escape them altogether.”

This is so, so, so quintessentially Anders. Oh, my stupid blonde mage. ): *hugs him*

Personally, I'm content to wait a little longer for updates if it means there's more to read. :D

featheredraven April 21 2011, 18:35:01 UTC

When I start thinking about everything we know about him, it just makes me sad because every time he gets something that he wants, or makes a choice on his own, something goes wrong. Templars show up, or Justice makes him crazy, or something. Guh. D:

blue_scarab April 21 2011, 19:05:54 UTC

Eeegh, spiders.. I mean, yay, new chapter!

I like longer chapters rather than super short quick updates, personally. I'm a very quick reader, so I devour short posts in about three seconds (non-literally) and then feel a little let down. I should probably just learn to read more slowly. Hm.

Also, I didn't find the switch in Hawke/Ismat to be jarring.

Also-also: “Isn't it magical ice? Does it actually work like real ice?” Hee.

featheredraven April 21 2011, 20:57:04 UTC

Okay, good! I feel like ~5000 words makes for a decent chapter length, so I'm thinking I'll probably stick with that unless it makes more sense for the chapter to be split at less or more words.

Some of the banter in this just sort of shows up out of nowhere. But! At least it all makes for some fun writing that isn't full of angst like my little oneshots!

_herzeleid April 22 2011, 06:33:17 UTC

Ooooh I really enjoy this! :D Carver is such a little twat still, and all the characterizations are spot on! Especially loving Varric's perspective. <3

And the first name thing isn't bothering me. It's *YOUR* Hawke and fic after all, do what you want! :D

featheredraven April 22 2011, 06:47:53 UTC

Well, it was more if the switching between the two seemed jarring, since I wasn't quite sure about it. I feel like it worked all right, though.

I'm glad the characterizations are working! I was actually a bit worried about Varric's section, since I wasn't sure if it really captured what his thought process might be.

And Jerk!Carver is so much fun. I don't even know why!

arysani April 22 2011, 14:08:18 UTC

Re: Hawke/Ismat - I think I've finally figured out what seems to work best: transitioning as We (the readers) and They (the other characters) get to know the PC better adds a subtle layer of familiarity. When you switch character POVs to people like Varric, who will likely call Hawke "Hawke" even if he was romanceable and they were sleeping together (ie: pretty damn familiar with each other lol), the last name remains appropriate even if you've switched familiarity levels so that you predominantly use Ismat.

Also, since it's your fic and I've already gushed about your arts, since I *knew* it was Ismat even without the name label, it wasn't jarring at all. So you had that in your favor as well.

And I echo the folks above: longer for updates is peachy if it means we can have longer chapters. I too am a quick reader, so I'd rather something I can sink my teeth into a bit.

Also: action scenes = muy bueno.

featheredraven April 25 2011, 07:33:13 UTC

I'm a rather slow at responding to people. I blame the weekend.

I figured something like this whole naming convention thing could work (in theory), but I wasn't sure if it would end up being too jarring. But it sounds like it isn't, so that is quite good! I figure that it will also work well in regards to the Anders/Hawke relationship and how that changes over time.

It's a bit odd to be writing action scenes that are sword and magic based again. I spent the past year or so writing original science fiction stuff, so it was all guns with the occasional fist fight.

jediboadicea April 23 2011, 04:06:14 UTC

I should have left a comment for the first chapter of this story, letting you know that I enjoyed it. I was bad! I will try to make up for it now ( ... )