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fee_folay

Star Trek 2009 story: HOST

Feb 12, 2010 12:29

AUTHOR:Fee Folay

FANDOM: Star Trek. In my mind, the characters are the Nutrek: ST XI versions, but I think you could safely picture them as TOS as well. Although I generally find the TOS versus AOS versions of the characters clearly distinguishable from each other, due to the unique point of view in this story there is nothing which makes it ( Read more... )

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ptork66 February 13 2010, 18:27:27 UTC

*blinks* I couldn't tear my eyes away from this. It made me squirm and a little queasy. But it was so incredibly good I couldn't look away. *goes back to trying to finish dinner* I think I'm having a delayed reaction and am going to go throw up now.

fee_folay February 13 2010, 19:04:00 UTC

Oh dear! I did try to warn readers it was a bit nasty.... Probably not the best choice for a relaxing dinner-time read. Sorry! I have to admit, I have written fics that readers claimed made them laugh, cry, hyperventilate, and faint, but this is the first time I have made someone puke!

Don't know if that is a good thing or not.

Fee (who offers to virtually rub circles on your back and make you a cup of virtual peppermint tea)

ptork66 February 13 2010, 19:15:48 UTC

Oh, don't worry, it was good! I did read your warnings, and I'm very glad it wasn't given away there. I was thoroughly intrigued. Dinner just happened to be finished while I was reading.

It was a really good story. I love stories that make me react in some way. Reading it was like a car wreck, just couldn't look away. It was good, and I'm glad I read it.

elfsausage February 13 2010, 19:34:00 UTC

Just. Wow! This is so cleverly written! Your aliens are just so damned ALIEN! Love the first person narration too - the contrast in voices between the bug & Bones just adds to the alien-ness of them. OK, so it's a bit gruesome :-) But it wouldn't have the power it does if it weren't.

This is REALLY GOOD FIC.

fee_folay February 13 2010, 21:03:36 UTC

Thank you. I am glad the "alien" nature of the buggy critters comes across. I was a bit worried I might not pull it off.

Thanks for commenting!

Fee

ratcreature February 13 2010, 20:06:34 UTC

Neat story, I enjoyed the alien perspective, though I'd have loved to get its reaction to the rescue and after as well, but I guess that would have clashed with the premise that we got this through a recording by Starfleet somehow, despite it being the alien's internal monolog.

fee_folay February 13 2010, 21:07:24 UTC

Yeah...that whole, "we got this through a recording by Starfleet somehow, despite it being the alien's internal monolog" thing is a bit dicey, I'll admit. My theory is that Thee’t’keee’at kept some kind of "Captain's Log" of her own - the memory recording. That's the neat aspect of "future based fic" - you don't have to explain everything, because it hasn't been invented yet!

ratcreature February 13 2010, 22:25:48 UTC

Ah. I didn't get that. At first my guess was that "memory recording" was some kind of genetic memory (like the goa'uld in Stargate have) so the offspring would somehow have the queens memory up to a point, and that it might have hatched later and Starfleet could have gotten the information from it afterwards, but then the memories continued after the eggs got into Kirk, so that theory didn't work out, and I was just puzzled. I would have been fine with just a perspective shift too, without this framing though, so it didn't bother me much.

fee_folay February 14 2010, 17:07:22 UTC

Oh... I like that whole genetic memory idea. Very cool. Maybe Starfleet just cut out the extraneous stuff - you know, everything that did not involve our intrepid heroes. LOL!

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fee_folay February 13 2010, 21:09:13 UTC

Thank you. I only have one TOS and one AOS piece at this point. An idea really has to capture my imagination for me to sit down and write - too many other distractions, mostly related to work.

anonymous February 14 2010, 21:05:24 UTC

Very, very chilling. I love the point of view of the "leader." It's interesting what he could not understand and I find what he can understand even more interesting.

Of course, Jim is going to get injured in all possible and impossible ways.

It would be great to see a sequel to this, but it is very self contained.

I think the tone is really great in this piece.

Thanks for posting.

fee_folay February 14 2010, 23:52:58 UTC

Thank you for the feedback. I very much enjoyed trying to 'get inside' Thee’t’keee’at's mind and decide what she would or would not be able to understand based upon her culture and alien nature. It was an interesting exercise, and I am glad you found something intriguing in how it was expressed.

Again, thank you for the comments. :)