Wow, that was all kinds of perfect! The break-ups were just great, realistic and harsh. The angry sex was hot, no question. I can't believe you haven't written smut before! Mother hen!Gerard was gorgeous.
I have no idea when I helped you with this but yeah :D not complaining. I bet I helped you just by existing.
So yeah, you've complained before that I never do the huge editorial reviews for you, so watch out, I'm unleashing it on you :P
I can't tell you how much I love you for managing to take something so close to the usual, you know,
A: OMGZ he is s0 hawt i fink i luv him A: :'( but i cn neber tell him B: OMGZ u r so hawt i luv u B: :'( i din't wanna tell u A: OMG ME 2!!11!88!8!!8 shag etc.
and still writing it so well and sans clichés and all around brilliantly. There's no retarded worries about him finding out, just the perfectly normal and realistic "come on, I don't wanna talk about my crush on your little brother/fiancé".
("dramatic death by lack of cleaning," *snicker*)
On that note, I would have perfectly loved an even more awkward conversation with Gerard, because it is his sweet little brother Frankie wants to ravage, after all. I don't mean that Gerard really has to have anything against said ravishing, but I think
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Awwww UR SEW SCHWEET! :D *snugs* ILUUUUU!!! <33333
You're kind of right about the whole 1. Mikey, 2. Frank, 3. Jamia think, but in telling Frank that he had to tell Jamia, he acted more on 2. rather than 3. :) I like your sentence though. :p Mikey = second woman = win XD
Frankie/Mikey are my OTP, so anything that contains them, together and in love, is fucking great. I liked teh way you brought in Jamia and Alicia and while I'm fans of both of them, the way you sort of tore them apart was interestingly written. I like how Alicia and Mikey had the heated arguements, while Frankie and Jamia were just heartbroken and miserable.
The smut scene was great. It never reached 'boisecks' level, but that's cool with me. I like the more subtle Mikey/Frank scenes anyway, it makes it more believable.
The last little bit, talking about a small dark headed boy being curled up waiting for Mikey, that's so adorable and was probably my favorite line in the whole piece.
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All in all, pretty freakin' good.
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It's Conor Oberst (Bright Eyes).
Doing the YMCA.
Backwards.
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He's teh pretty tho. *g*
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So yeah, you've complained before that I never do the huge editorial reviews for you, so watch out, I'm unleashing it on you :P
I can't tell you how much I love you for managing to take something so close to the usual, you know,
A: OMGZ he is s0 hawt i fink i luv him
A: :'( but i cn neber tell him
B: OMGZ u r so hawt i luv u
B: :'( i din't wanna tell u
A: OMG ME 2!!11!88!8!!8
shag etc.
and still writing it so well and sans clichés and all around brilliantly. There's no retarded worries about him finding out, just the perfectly normal and realistic "come on, I don't wanna talk about my crush on your little brother/fiancé".
("dramatic death by lack of cleaning," *snicker*)
On that note, I would have perfectly loved an even more awkward conversation with Gerard, because it is his sweet little brother Frankie wants to ravage, after all. I don't mean that Gerard really has to have anything against said ravishing, but I think ( ... )
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You're kind of right about the whole 1. Mikey, 2. Frank, 3. Jamia think, but in telling Frank that he had to tell Jamia, he acted more on 2. rather than 3. :) I like your sentence though. :p Mikey = second woman = win XD
Yay small touches! *Blush*
Heh. Sex. :$ ILUUUUUUU! :D:D:D <3333333333333333333333
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I liked teh way you brought in Jamia and Alicia and while I'm fans of both of them, the way you sort of tore them apart was interestingly written. I like how Alicia and Mikey had the heated arguements, while Frankie and Jamia were just heartbroken and miserable.
The smut scene was great. It never reached 'boisecks' level, but that's cool with me. I like the more subtle Mikey/Frank scenes anyway, it makes it more believable.
The last little bit, talking about a small dark headed boy being curled up waiting for Mikey, that's so adorable and was probably my favorite line in the whole piece.
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:D :D :D :D :D :D :D <----- ME! :D
<3333333 You're so KIND and THANK YOU SO MUCH! :D I'm really happy you liked! :D
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