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Fic: Grace - Chapter 10

Jan 17, 2007 20:55

Title: Grace - Chapter 10
Rating: NC-17
Fandom: P!atd (Brendon/Ryan)

Loretta will spend forever telling me that she has been married twice.

Once to her husband, a man with no hair and a bazillion degrees in art and literature and business. A man with humble tendencies and crooked teeth and a small art gallery in the LA that Ryan lives in.

Second, ( Read more... )

grace, panic at the disco, bandom

Comments 77

i_drink_gerbils January 17 2007, 12:06:39 UTC

Oh God. So, so wonderful. I honestly don't know if I've ever commented on this story but it is, without a doubt, one of the best stories out there right now. This sex scene was perfectly characteristic of the story and the characters and GAH I love you.

flash_indie January 18 2007, 00:03:48 UTC

Your username made me laugh for like, five minutes. Seriously. ^^

Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying!

lushlips_x January 17 2007, 12:34:27 UTC

This story is pretty much perfect. I don't even know what to say about it since I suck at commenting but yeah, this is so good, from the story line to the way you describe the characters. I love it.

flash_indie January 18 2007, 00:05:01 UTC

You don't suck at commenting at all! Thankyouthankyouthankyou!

x__bangbangxx January 17 2007, 13:24:07 UTC

So, we’re fucking here, in the middle of his shitty, bohemian apartment, and all I can hear, all I can think is, ‘no strings, no strings, no strings’ only there are strings.

When the hell did I start crying? This is too beautiful. You can count on me printing this all out when it's done <3

Just, gosh.

flash_indie January 18 2007, 00:06:28 UTC

*hands you a tissue*

*blushblushblush* Thank you so much, you gonna print it out? *giggles insanely* That is unbelievably flattering. Thankyouthankyou.

erato January 17 2007, 13:31:17 UTC

Wow...just...wow. It takes a lot to impress me with a sex scene, 'cause they often tend towards the cliche, but this was really beautiful. I love that you included all of the little blips along the way. This made it so much more real...'cause, you know, sex rarely is the perfect experience that so often crops up in fanfiction.

I also adored the inclusion of all of Brendon's thoughts. Something about it increased the overall pace of the chapter, which was fitting, considering the content. Not to mention the bit about Brendon thinking about trees made me laugh. XP Oh, and the image at the end...the string image? So so so effective.

Gah, I can't wait for the next chapter. ♥ ♥ ♥

flash_indie January 18 2007, 00:08:36 UTC

Guh, thank you so much. I'm so happy you were impressed by the sex scene, coz it's my first time writing it and I was painfully nervous.

Next chapter will be up soon hopefully!

amplifiedstatic January 17 2007, 13:34:34 UTC

Let me just say, you should become a professional writer, because creativity and the ability to let it run loose in the form of words should never, ever go to waste.

That being said, you're one of the best writers I know with imagery, the visual of the 'strings' was absolutely beautiful. Your characterizations are strong and constant (even with one of my favourite characters, Loretta). I also enjoy how your character's actions/reactions waver with their moods yet still stay true to their personalities - many writers can't pull that off.

Your relationships are so complex in that way that adults are expected to know what to say and do but, really, have no fucking clue, and in that way that we're meant to make decisions but in the end, most of the time, decisions just make themselves on our behalf.

I loved how you focused on Brendon's thoughts towards the end, because you'd expect Ryan to be the one that's making so much of them fucking, yet Brendon was the one thinking of trees, as you put it ( ... )

flash_indie January 18 2007, 00:43:58 UTC

Oh, wow, *is so unbelievably flattered*.

For starters, thank you so, so much. Like, awesome comment.

I do put effort into making sure that characterization is pretty constant and pretty...true. I mean, when I'm reading other peoples fics or even books, I always get angry about actions that seem very out of character.

I'm a sucker for complexity, for complicated relationships and complicated storylines. I like to think as a reader, and I like to make people think as a writer. It sets off the warm and fuzzies knowing that I'm actually pulling it off. ^^

Just, the whole comment is wonderful, thank you so much. :D