fic: Barefoot

[flawsrevenge]

So!  I am successfully relocated but still have no permanent internet connection or really permanent anything.  The life of a nomad, how sweet it is...  I have seen and enjoyed the new episodes of Prison Break, and I intend to try my best to keep caught up on all the fannish goodness.  Or to get caught up.  One of those.  Too many shows, too little

Comments

[pbeeslysweater]

Yay new fic!! And it's Charlie! And Ted!

Such a great glimpse into yet another side of Charlie and his past.

Charlie pictures flying over the ground, legs pumping, body straining, imagines himself soaring past rivers and lakes and through valleys and over mountains. All the bones in his spine relax, here, with his eyes closed where he can’t see the past twelve years of his life. Here, he is the earth beneath him and the air around him. He is joy and life, and definitely not condemnation and deceit. He is the blood in his veins and the wind in his lungs, and bones and tendons and muscles under his skin. He is not bruises and breaks, or scars and crooked toes. He is--

I loooooove the imagery with this bit. I love that in the little twinges of muscle and cracking of bones he can feel his life returning. So fitting.

There's just so much here...*scurries back to beginning to re-read*

So good to have you back in the fic-universe! :-)

[flawsrevenge]

So good to be back in the fic-universe. Except now it's sooo hard to stay away. I woke up this morning and went "need fic!!!" and there was no fic, so I had to write my own, but it was lonely and I need to be READING. *is sad*

Imagery, yes. There is that. I think I'm little good for more than that these days. And yet we peservere.

[cmk418]

Loved this. It's a very nice glimpse of Charlie and the ways he finds in the present to escape his past. I also loved that you included Ted in this - the contrast between the two of them and what they need from the world is quite nice. And I really like Ted providing the shock to the system at the end - it's unsettling for a moment and it completely works. Well done!

[flawsrevenge]

Yay Ted! I enjoy him so much for exactly these reasons. He's so good for Charlie. ("Am I Robin, Charlie?") Thank you very much!

great story

[speakfire]

We're always up for fanfics, who are you kidding?! As far as you loving him first... you're right, fangirls are scary! I'd be careful making a claim like that. Truthfully, does it matter who loves him first? No, I think it's who's got him right now, in the moment ;)

Anyway great story, great mood that you've portrayed. I like Charlie's being in the moment, enjoying every little detail of his life, especially when comparing it to his time in prison. And I like how you've done Ted's nervous energy.

Re: great story

[flawsrevenge]

Mostly I claim shit that just to see if people are paying attention. But good call on the who's got him in the moment bit. Dani, you think? Or Connie? Or Jennifer? So hard to choose...

Anyways, thank you muchly!

[15lbpurebunny]

GAH....I love this!

This is great! I love your internal Charlie voice and Ted is great.

I love these lines:

"It’s peaceful, in his big house with no furniture. It’s quiet and it’s relaxed. At night there will be crickets, and sometimes owls and coyote. Natural sounds instead of hundreds of snoring men, or screaming men, or shouted insults."

It's like you reached into my brain and described how I imagined it for him, too, being in this new house, at the top of this quiet but alive canyon.

Lovely. Can't wait for more!

[flawsrevenge]

Oooh, brain reaching. Nice. Made me think of Heroes actually, but less, you know, gross. ...If you don't watch Heroes you can completely ignore that...

Also! Thank you so much! I really like that you liked it, because I really like what you're doing with Charlie yourself!

[15lbpurebunny]

Ha! I've never watched Heroes, so I have no choice but to ignore that. But, still, I think I get the gist....

Yes, I really did like it. Very much.

Looking forward to more.

[rose_griffes]

Love this! Yay, new Life fic!

[flawsrevenge]

Yay! Thank you!