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Fic: The Monster in the Closet

Aug 15, 2006 06:31

So ironically, despite how exhausted I was, I slept poorly and was up at quarter to six. Rather than begin the ordeal of unpacking, I logged on to see what was up with Multiverse - I'd received a piece of feedback, so I knew it was up. Turns out the authors have been revealed, so I can post the story in my journal! This is...dark. It was going ( Read more... )

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storydivagirl August 15 2006, 13:51:27 UTC

I believe I sent feedback on this story because, while it made me a bit queasy (I'm a big baby) at parts, I loved the dark feel of it. It's strange how calm Kaylee is in the story, but I love her interactions with Rodney.

fourteenlines August 21 2006, 03:00:09 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you like the feel. It was so much easier to figure out how Kaylee (any Kaylee) would react to Rodney than the other way around.

I see Kaylee as having started to shut down in this story - she's been in captivity, oh, at least a few months at that point. And I tried to indicate the process by comparing her to the "others." If I continued this story, she'd be seeing a lot of Heightmeyer. *g*

farwing August 15 2006, 13:52:59 UTC

Wow. This really is dark. But there's a ray or two of hope at the end. Yikes. Awesome-scary.

fourteenlines August 21 2006, 02:56:25 UTC

Thanks! I'm getting the impression that people don't believe me when I say I've written something dark. *g*

"Awesome-scary" is wonderful feedback to get for something like this. Hee!

vonniek August 15 2006, 15:01:27 UTC

Holy crap, that's dark. But believably so, and the interaction between Kaylee and Rodney were fab. And beautifully-written as always.

fourteenlines August 21 2006, 02:55:12 UTC

Well, I did say. *g* And thank you - I'm glad you think so.

anatolia1 August 15 2006, 23:47:43 UTC

This is a scary, creepy, yet ultimately hopeful story and that is a tough combination to pull off. Thank you so much for sharing.

fourteenlines August 21 2006, 02:54:31 UTC

Thank you! I didn't even realize until I got this comment that the story is best categorized as horror. Huh! I didn't think I'd ever write horror.

I don't think I could have written it if they didn't escape in the end. And just imagine what Kaylee will think of Atlantis!

ratcreature August 18 2006, 12:29:27 UTC

It was creepy, and kind of gross, what with the Wraith-eating, but I really enjoyed it. Great story.

fourteenlines August 21 2006, 02:52:56 UTC

Well, I maintain that eating Wraith is better than what it implies about their usual meals, but I see your point. Thanks for letting me know you liked it!