Unmistakeable

[freshdumbledore]

Unmistakable

Comments

[arollinggirl]

I LOVED IT <33!
I really like your writing. :D.
I also like how you described the club. "Loud music without any clever lyrics but full of bass blared from the speakers and cut through his hearing.Barely clothed girls clung to boys,who even wore their sunglasses in dark club,pretending to dance.Bright and colorful lights burned into his eyes and it was hard to recognize anyone on the dance floor."

[freshdumbledore]

Thank you very much <3
I'm glad you liked it!

[arollinggirl]

Np ^^!
I'm glad you wrote this <3 :D

[hvnlyumbrlla]

I loved the ending to this and the New Years scene. Oh my gosh, so cute! In my head I was like, kiss kiss kiss kiss COME ON KISS! :D Keep on writing, love! As for con-crit I would say focus on grammar and spelling. Maybe ask someone to be your beta? But again, it was good :)

[freshdumbledore]

Thank you so much :)
Especially for the con-critic, I would love to have a beta but well..I actually have no one who would do it since all my friends aren't really slash fans.
Well, but it's great that you liked it :)

[hvnlyumbrlla]

You can get someone in the com to be your beta? All you would do it email/ message the story to them, get the edits, then it would be sent back to you.

We should have a post designed for beta suggestions...hmmm *gears in my head are working*

[freshdumbledore]

That would be great! I actually never thought of asking someone in the com, maybe because I'm too shy...

[michaelangelo24]

That was fairly good. I liked how you had several short stories that built up upon each other. :) My only recommendation would be to add spaces after every bit of punctuation. It makes your writing seem cluttered if you don't do that.

[freshdumbledore]

Thanks a lot! I'm gonna keep your advice in mind and I'll make sure to use it next time.:)

[smoshslashbabe]

That was very good! I really enjoyed it(: hope you do a sequel because you kinda left a cliffhanger!!

[freshdumbledore]

Aw,your comment made me smile :)
But I think I have to disappoint you because I've never plannend a sequel, it's actually supposed to end with a cliffhanger so you can imagine yourself what will happen ;)

[smoshslashbabe]

Aww :/ haha but oooh I can imagine the sexiness in my head!! <3

[freshdumbledore]

Thank you sooo much for your lovely comment :) I don't think that I'll write a sequel because the end was actually planned first and it never changed.But I already have ideas for a long term story.
Anyway I'm glad you enjoyed it <3