Comments | fullmetalsues: See Spot Run. Run Spot Run.

fullmetalsues

See Spot Run. Run Spot Run.

Jan 12, 2006 17:37

This stu-thor cannot be 20 years old. I know nine year olds who write better than this. It's basic grammar, combining your short choppy sentences so they don't sound like a "See Spot Run" crossover ( Read more... )

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revulo January 12 2006, 23:59:58 UTC

Vengeance and...Scotty. What? Is this person serious? Jeez...

“Isn’t it obvious?” asked Scott. “You killed me,” said Scott before collapsing dead on the still glowing transmutation circle.
Thanks, Ed! *hug*

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fullmetalsues January 13 2006, 01:45:25 UTC

XD It's mine too.

But I don't stand in the middle of the street and glare at them (not that I live in a town where mary sues walk the street). I attack them with sporks.

pewter_alyssum January 13 2006, 05:28:24 UTC

If I ever saw a Mary-Sue walking the street in my town, I'd hand her some money and tell her that she doesn't need to use her body to earn money, and buy yourself some real clothes, chickie! *smirk*

Too easy? Yes. Too fun? Why, yes.

umi_mikazuki January 13 2006, 00:37:50 UTC

Ed got tore up from killing Anime!Greed, no way in hell he'd just kill 'Scott' and be like, "What have I done?" There'd be some screaming involved. *rolls eyes*

But, that's one Stu gone! Yay! Saves us from killing him.

hola_meg_a_cola January 13 2006, 00:59:36 UTC

That ho bag stole my (real) name. She must die.

ipitydaf00l January 13 2006, 01:46:42 UTC

I'm not sure what disturbs me more. Is it the fact that someone wrote this, or the fact that it has been dissected in order to be mocked? Decisions, decisions...

phantomsues January 13 2006, 06:40:43 UTC

Oh come on! Dissect Sue fic with us! It's fun and educational. Heh, if you think that's bad, you should read some of mine. Ghost Master commentary every two or three lines. *grins*