LJI Topic 18 topic: "Blood Harmony"

[furzicle]

Betty was on her hands and knees yanking at the weeds that were constantly popping up amongst her dahlias. The sunshine had started out as a welcome warmth after the chill of the house but by now was growing too warm. When a rivulet of sweat trickled down her forehead into her eyes, Betty sat up and cursed. “Drat these imposters! Do they think I’ll

Comments

[adoptedwriter]

Cute story! It worked well with the prompt.

[furzicle]

Thank you! You are always the first commenter! You are very Johnny-on-the-spot!

[roina_arwen]

Very cool! My only question is how many twins does Betty have? If Dorothy and Shirley are both her twins, technically that makes them triplets. Maybe Shirley is their unseen sister? That’s the only part that confused me.

[roina_arwen]

My other suggestion is to have Dorothy’s middle name be Shirley? Then Betty can tell her, “Oh, that’s my twin sister’s middle name!”

[furzicle]

Thanks for your comment. I looked over the story once, then two more times. It turns out you have discovered a great mistake in my writing! I have changed the sister's name to Shirley. As was intended in the original version, Bashalli does have the same American name as Betty's sister. But I realized that Shirley is an approximation of Bashalli and is thus a better nickname for Bashalli. So we have Betty and her twin sister Shirley, as well as the Indian woman Bashalli who sometimes goes by Shirley.

Sorry for the confusion BUT THANKS SO MUCH FOR BRINGING THE ERROR TO MY ATTENTION!
Note to others: In the original story, the sister inadvertently got two different names.

Then, when I tried to amend my comment to you, LJ wouldn't let me do it! This is the new version of the comment.

[karmasoup]

Interesting neither of them seems to have made the connection or be concerned about the fact that Bashilli is also regenerating at a rate twice theirs at the same time, which apparently even extends to her van... :-/

[furzicle]

Excellent observation!

[lyssa027]

This sort of reminds me of a Doctor Who episode ;)

[mvlady1]

Loved this one! I was wondering if you'd have them go overboard with the lotion and turn into 10-year old girls. That would be like an episode from The Twilight Zone.