LJ Idol: Winding Up

[gildedage]

It was barely 8am and it was going to be a scorcher. Mr. Peter’s across the street, his glasses fogged up when he went outside to get the Commercial. The air was so thick it pressed in on you, you had to pull it deep down into your lungs and within minutes your body would be as slick as if you’d been dipped and ready to fry. People’d race from the

Comments

[antianhedonia]

I'm fascinated by these two!

[gildedage]

I like them too, especially the kid.

[lilycobalt]

Great story! The description of that scorching summer day really drew me in--I felt that humidity.

[gildedage]

Thanks!

[streetnights]

Fiction. This. Good. Like.

In slightly more eloquent terms, I thought the characterizations were excellently done and the scene a well-executed one. You have my vote!

[gildedage]

Oh thanks! (in both terms.) I appreciate it! It was fun to write.

[_rabidwombat_]

This was very intriguing. I liked it!

[gildedage]

Hooray!

[rattsu]

“Some things don’t wind up in the books. ‘Specially things people don’t want to remember.”

A great truth and a great line.

[gildedage]

Ha! I feel like I've heard it before, I just can't remember where.