Jackpot, Tie Breaker

[gildedage]

The first time it happened, it terrified her. She’d been standing in front of the mirror after her shower, trying to see herself in the steamed over glass. Instead, she saw him, with straw colored hair and gray green eyes, gangly as a teenager could get where her reflection should have been.

Comments

[myrna_bird]

Oh interesting, I wanted to find out what was going on right from the start. I thought there might be an alternate universe but they are in common time. Now we know they can see each other in these magical mirrors. And what is the reason to get these two people to meet? This definitely appeals to me and I'd like to know how it proceeds. Good entry. Good luck in the run-off!

[gildedage]

Thank you!

[pixiebelle]

You certainly had me drawn in and wanting to read more early on!

I do agree with nishi_kaze a bit about not being sure if it would be nice to know the reason or not. I really wanted to know what was going on.

And I was a bit confused with him seeing her again as a teen and how that all happened. Like they went back in time? I may have missed something, I get confused easily, but I was slightly confused.

Overall, I liked the story a lot and you certainly are a wonderful fiction writer.

[gildedage]

Thanks! Maybe I didn't make it clear! If you're talking about him seeing the girl in the hospital, I wanted that to be deliberately vague! (Which seems cheesy given I'm saying it after the fact- but I think it adds to him wanting to see her more than he wanted to see himself at that moment.)

[vaguelyclear]

This was really interesting! You had me hooked right from the beginning and wondering how it was going to end. Really great piece!

[gildedage]

Thanks for your comment!

[roina_arwen]

I really liked the way you told this from both angles. Well done and good luck!

[gildedage]

Yes! I am in a two person story rut, I feel. Next time there needs to be a mob scene or something.

[soprano1790]

Hey. I really like this! It's really cool. How did you come up with something like this? What a great story. I want ot read more.

[gildedage]

I get inspired from weird places. Having a magic mirror is sort of a fantasy trope, and I saw an article in People magazine about a plastic surgeon who donates his time and money to repairing soldier's faces after they've been brutally injured in IED attacks.... So I mashed them together, I guess!