Title: For the Greater Good
Characters: MWPP, Snape, McGonagall
Word Count: 2900
Rating & Warnings: PG-13, mild swearing
Summary: “He means you’re the free one.” Sirius smirked. “The one everyone doesn’t suspect because you’re the good boy. Remus really can't believe how hard it is nowadays to get a decent detention...
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As always, this was the right balance of funny and deep, the characterisation was fab (really liked the comment about it being Sirius and not Peter who gives away conspiricies, lovely bit of foreshadowing) and the plot was engaging.
I think my favourite thing might have been dazzlingsparklyvampire!Snape, lol.
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I seem to be unable to resist sticking a foreshadowing line in about Peter, and the reason he pulled the wool over everyone's eyes being that they knew him so well - and everything could equally have a perfectly normal or, as it turned out, sinister meaning. I also like the idea of Sirius giving himself away simply because he can't resist wanting to be in charge, so I'm glad you thought that worked.
I know shimotsuki has seen the Twilight film, so I was thinking she might appreciate sparkly!Snape nearly as much as Remus did. Though perhaps Snape also enjoyed his moment as SNappz?! ;)
It's always lovely to get reviews from you, and thank you again. :)
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Oh, that's very kind of you to say so. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed your autumn Meta fic yet. Since you have the misfortune of being one of my favourite authors, it means I always read your fics as soon as they're posted regardless of whether I have time to review them, which is very naughty of me.
And I'm glad you can't resist foreshadowing - I love the foreshadowing. :)
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It's okay till I can't resist the subtle-as-a-plank one. You know, "Peter entered the room bearing a t-shirt saying I Villain!, humming one day I will betray you all under his breath, and refusing to touch any knives or forks as he has a sudden aversion to silver near his hands..."
I'm sorry I haven't reviewed your autumn Meta fic yet. Since you have the misfortune of being one of my favourite authors, it means I always read your fics as soon
No apologies necessary, especially as that's as nice to hear as a review, and as I have managed to review the total of one fic at Meta this time so I know exactly what it's like to get behind and struggle to catch up. So please forget about it. :)
How's your Advent fic doing? About to start/going brilliantly/hoping (like me) the deadline is 2010...? ;)
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All those little pranks Remus tries are hilarious. I especially like the sea-sick charm. Inspired, but clearly not good enough. Poor Remus, he's so good that he can't even pull off a prank himself. He's such a nice boy, it's no wonder Dora likes him. I would have.
All the insightful bits were fantastic, particularly the part about all four of them being nervous about the future. Your "little" Remus is so good at picking up on little bits about the others. Knowing what we know and reading with hindsight, that part near the top about Sirius always giving away the prank when Peter never will is rather chilling.
It's a bit early for me, so if I haven't made sense, please let me know.
It was an adorable fic. :)Your Marauders are so cute they're almost fuzzy. Well, I suppose Remus *is* occasionally fuzzy...
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Am very glad you liked this as I haven't written the Marauders for ages and it's still fun! I liked the irony of Remus being so 'good' he simply couldn't misbehave, no matter how hard he tried. And that, normally, he'd have been rather chuffed with that... (I do agree that Tonks would have found this incredibly endearing. And laughed her head off.)
I couldn't resist the line about Peter at the start as I like the idea that the reason he pulled the wool over everyone's eyes was that they knew him so well - and that everything could equally have had a perfectly normal or, as it turned out later on, sinister meaning. Also that Sirius was so clever, but not clever enough to hide his own nature. But then he wouldn't think he had to.
Many thanks for such nice comments. It's always lovely to get reviews from you.:D
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As for the homework (am presuming you mean the line about the Charms one); I might not have made that as clear as it should be, but as it was about the importance of Memory Charms and Remus was consistently losing it, he was thinking that would be bound to get up Flitwick's nose... ;)
Many thanks again for such nice comments. It's much appreciated.
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All Remus' attempts at getting a detention are too funny! I cracked up about sparkly!Snape (though I have to admit, Twilight didn't occur to me, lol) and Remus' gas problem after the sodas, lol. And his delight/horror at being known as the good boy. And it's so cute at the end that McGonagall still won't believe he was behind it all, and the others so happy to stand up and get a detention with him. One last hurrah.
You do write the Marauders -- and teenaged!Remus -- so very well.
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I'm glad you found them all funny, and liked the irony of Remus being half thrilled and half absolutely horrified with his standing as the 'good boy'. I did start off with the idea of briefly making Snape into an unexpected sex symbol at Hogwarts, thanks to Remus' best efforts, then was tempted to write the word 'dazzling' about his complexion and couldn't resist the Twilight link. Snape as a sparkly vampire just seemed meant to be! But, more seriously, it was meant to read as a last hurrah, as you said, to their friendship, and so it seemed ( ... )
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Thank you for leaving such nice comments. :)
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