ugh, LJ wouldn't let me preview. i'm over it. FWIW, lol.
i thought about this story for a while, after drivin through montana last summer. i know the timing's off, with the OS, but oh well... i wanted them in the friggin heat for once. :D
Lovely! it's great to see ennis being enthusastic and doing something spontaneous! you almost had a role-reverse there :)
jack looked over lovingly at the man beside him and reached a hand out.
ennis took it and placed it on his thigh, covering it with calloused fingers, saying nothing, but squeezing tight.
Squee! I love this! you don't know how many times I wished they had this scene in the movie!! especially after that heartbreaking "I miss you so much I could whip babies"...
i know, right? they sat so far apart in that scene... that always bothered me. jack should be on the ground between ennis's thighs. :D and where were the neck rubs and body massages? LOL.
Ennis didn't seem to be riled up at all about this, but told jack to be careful. "Might get shot by the husband, or your wife, or both, if you don't watch out."
Then ennis smiled. It wasn't much, but there it was, and jack felt crushed inside.
Ack. Even reversed it crushes me, too.
Where did you get the pic at the end? is it photoshopped?
I once thought of writing a similar type of one-shot but in a rapeseed field. (Just Google Image "rapeseed field" and you'll see the attraction.)
oh do write it please! :D (but lol RAPESEED!what a name) hey that could be a community challenge too.J&E in a field.poppy field,strawberry field,sunflower field,pumpkin field,corn field,wheat field etc.
LOL, the opportunities of that challenge! a pumpkin field, yes! LMAO. they could have a three-way with a nice sun-warmed pumpkin, lol... :D
i just googled rapeseed field. it reminds me of that old coldplay song... "...and it was all yellow..." they coulda filmed the video in one in full bloom, instead of that cold gray beach.
she'd found clothing in jack's dresser from time to time, items that did not belong to jack at all, like t shirts and other clothes: a shirt with holes, a pair of striped socks more than once, so worn out. underwear with a label she'd never seen before. aw.(i assume they're all ennis' the hopeless romantic that i am)
nice to see ennis letting go and doing what he wants and not feel bad about it for once. and the ending.gah.i wish.it kills me in the movie that he doesn't do anything after jack says i miss you so much. ;_; well ok he spoons jack while sleeping but he is sleeping. :/
oh, i should have said that -- yes, all ennis's clothes. he didn't care much for the others, it was only what he wanted to remember, who he really longed to hold. oh yeah, the spoon. i forgot about the "miss you so much" part when writing this. i lost my online copy of the OS, and the book too, somehow! yeah yay the pics fit nicely too. after i finished the story i found the first one, and thought i should have written in suspenders on ennis too. :D
Very nice, happy at first, sad at the end *sniff sniff* And the pictures (both), very nice. I have many sunflowers in my backyard. They came up in a strange place this year, where they hadn't been before. I just let them grow, they're huge. Not sure how long till they bloom. ♥ This story put me in a peaceful mood. Thanks!
oh cool! sunflowers are so awesome. we always grew some in our garden, way in the back by the corn. (when i was growing up in colorado.) bees love them, and then, the seeds! yum. glad you enjoyed the story. :)
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i thought about this story for a while, after drivin through montana last summer. i know the timing's off, with the OS, but oh well... i wanted them in the friggin heat for once. :D
excuse any typos, i'm going to bed now. ciaooo.
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jack looked over lovingly at the man beside him and reached a hand out.
ennis took it and placed it on his thigh, covering it with calloused fingers, saying nothing, but squeezing tight.
Squee! I love this! you don't know how many times I wished they had this scene in the movie!! especially after that heartbreaking "I miss you so much I could whip babies"...
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glad you found it lovely, it was fun to write. xo
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Wonderful one shot.
Thank you for sharing,
Paola
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thanks, glad you enjoyed reading. :)
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Then ennis smiled. It wasn't much, but there it was, and jack felt crushed inside.
Ack. Even reversed it crushes me, too.
Where did you get the pic at the end? is it photoshopped?
I once thought of writing a similar type of one-shot but in a rapeseed field. (Just Google Image "rapeseed field" and you'll see the attraction.)
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hey that could be a community challenge too.J&E in a field.poppy field,strawberry field,sunflower field,pumpkin field,corn field,wheat field etc.
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i just googled rapeseed field. it reminds me of that old coldplay song... "...and it was all yellow..." they coulda filmed the video in one in full bloom, instead of that cold gray beach.
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aw i love that song."d'you know for you i bleed myself dry"(i love coldplay)
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aw.(i assume they're all ennis' the hopeless romantic that i am)
nice to see ennis letting go and doing what he wants and not feel bad about it for once.
and the ending.gah.i wish.it kills me in the movie that he doesn't do anything after jack says i miss you so much. ;_; well ok he spoons jack while sleeping but he is sleeping. :/
p.s. oh and the pics are lovely.
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i love your replies.
i have the short story on word doc.if you want.
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This story put me in a peaceful mood. Thanks!
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