I'm able to sleep

[godotishere]

One day a man was walking down a crowded city street. He was clutching a

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[thespectacle]

crowded city street
clutching package; small; thin; close
flew past; knocked down
bumping into scream--curses

drop bridge
tightly grasping in air
greedy wheel; broken heart
dead man's wrist; dead man's face
moist insipid tears fell
crumpled dirty piece of paper

left behind
stay alive
open eyes
someone will find you

[godotishere]

Alas, his poetry is not crap
and it makes me smile

[thespectacle]

...look closer...you will see...then i will show more...

I'm able to sleep

[godotishere]

Well, there is quite the obvious similarity...your poem is, i don't know, BASED on my story? Well, maybe i'm misinterpreting...ya never know ::winks::, but is there something deeper i'm bypassing?