Well, that was awkward and quite wonderful. But, not the way you want to play two brothers :) I like having the interaction of Van/ESS, then each of them with the director, and then having each of them bouncing off of Jake and Jenny. We get to see them with each other and then mulling and talking about it with someone else. It really explores the emotion.
I adore that Van referred to him as ESS (as I usually do) :)
Everything in the play scene had me right there with them.
Eric knew how to pivot so he could look at Van, without Van’s grip loosening. The younger man briefly noticed that Eric’s arm was just as strong as it was then. He was briefly overcome by the familiarity of Eric’s body, a gentle reminder of their past scenes.
I tried not to be so "gushy" in my comments this time. I felt like it may have been off-putting to you. But there's something about the way you write the characters' connection that really pulls me in.
Awkward and wonderful. I love that, really. I'm glad you liked the follow-through with this chapter, that was very important to cherimola as well. I very much enjoy hearing from you and your "gushy"-ness, but I'm still very much shocked that people enjoy my stories and I'm often overwhelmed in that I cannot find a proper way to express my gratitude and joy in the comments. I do always enjoy hearing from you. Thank you. ~Ali
I haven't had the chance to comment on your story yet, but I wanted to say that I really am enjoying it so far. It's different from anything I've read, and yet it feels familiar, ya know? i especially like that you put the two parts, present and past, one after the other like that. Very well done, looking forward to more!
And no I didn't feel embarassed for Van/Eric. I felt like locking them in a room and ordering them to get it on! LOL
Thank you for stopping by and commenting. I'm so glad you're enjoying the past/present take on the story. I liked your response not embarrassed by locking them in a room. :-) Thank you. ~Ali
What really struck me about their rehearsal today was how vulnerable and exposed they are up there on the stage. I've done some amateur acting when I was younger but I don't think I'd dare now. You just risk putting too much of yourself on display. They're brave to do it.
I loved what you said about the vulnerable and exposed. If anything I think that was the entire goal or experience of writing the scene and the guys' reaction to it. Thank you. ~Ali
I have to second what ltklo has said. You're writing just allows the reader to be completely enveloped by the story. I can really feel the tension between the two of them and the uncomfortable nature of the discussion with the director.
So Eric is dating men? Hmm...doesn't that add a new element to the story?!
Thank you both for such a lovely comment. Eric dated a man not necessarily men. And I hope it adds an interesting new element to the story. And yes, next chapter will be up on Sunday. :-) ~Ali
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I adore that Van referred to him as ESS (as I usually do) :)
Everything in the play scene had me right there with them.
Eric knew how to pivot so he could look at Van, without Van’s grip loosening. The younger man briefly noticed that Eric’s arm was just as strong as it was then. He was briefly overcome by the familiarity of Eric’s body, a gentle reminder of their past scenes.
I tried not to be so "gushy" in my comments this time. I felt like it may have been off-putting to you. But there's something about the way you write the characters' connection that really pulls me in.
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And no I didn't feel embarassed for Van/Eric. I felt like locking them in a room and ordering them to get it on! LOL
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So Eric is dating men? Hmm...doesn't that add a new element to the story?!
Can't wait for the next chapter - Sunday?
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