Comments | gunsmoke_sues: A paper cut soaked in lemon juice wouldn't hurt as much.

gunsmoke_sues

A paper cut soaked in lemon juice wouldn't hurt as much.

Jan 17, 2004 20:29

Well now. It’s rather sad, how I can simply click on ff.net Anime=> Trigun=> set it to 5000 words or more on a PG-13 rating and WHAM. Mary sue. In CAPTIAL LETTERS.

OMG LIKE WOW1.

Ouch. My brainmeats hurt. I can’t read anymore of this, I might do something stupid.

Story Or Series Title: SOMEONE TO RETURN MY LOVE
Fandom: Trigun.
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donna_c_punk January 17 2004, 09:51:02 UTC

" My life is hard, and miserable. People do fear me...but other's try to get me." " I know how you feel. My life is no walk in the park. It's like walking straight through Death Valley."

What the fuck is this shit? Is she, like, trying to relate or whatever? Ow.

"It's late. I really need to go in." Netorie said, standing up. " Yes it is. Netorie?" Vash stood up and faced her. " Yeah?" Netorie looked up at him. " I really liked talking to you tonight." " Really?" They were looking into each other's eyes. " Yeah." Vash said softly. He brushed his hand against her cheek. Then he started to lean down. They both closed their eyes. And he kissed her.

::makes like Meryl - gags and passes out onto the floor:: GAAAAAAH!

gj_fate January 17 2004, 16:06:54 UTC

Have you seen the all chapter that's nothing but author's note? (Rules, what rules?) It's a world of pain.

Netorie is actually a character I made up for a play type thing. It's called, "The Clow Knights." Though-out this play, various anime people are added and come into contact. Like.DBZ, Gundam Wing, Trigun, YU- GI-OH, Escaflowne.and many others. So that's why netorie was put into this fan fiction. She's actually the princess of the clow kingdom. But.acts nothing like she's suppose to.

(Why do authors think capital letters are optional?)

Ow. OW. I won't post the rest, but be assured it's even more painful than that. Like, when the author points out Netorie "had a VERY rough past" and "loves to see blood shed" (why she and Vash were MADE for each other) and proceeds to try and impress us with this: " At one point her bangs were stained and dripping of blood." OH WOW SHE IS TEH HARDKORE!!1!!1 What about the rest of her face, though?

I'd love to give her a terrible, scathing review but she's 13. Curses.

silver_arm January 17 2004, 17:26:00 UTC

I'd love to give her a terrible, scathing review but she's 13
Oh, don't worry about that. I have a 13-year-old sister who has been able to write better than this since she was 6.

Fire away.

donna_c_punk January 18 2004, 04:07:25 UTC

I have a 13-year-old sister who has been able to write better than this since she was 6.

Fire away.

Here, here! What's with this unwritten rule that we can't flame the shit out of someone's story because she's "only 13" or what have you? If she's old enough to post it, she's old enough to take the heat. This is why I never posted anything until I hit 20.

calluna21 January 17 2004, 16:25:00 UTC

Your reward will be $$98 billion.

Well, *someone* on Gunsmoke has a lot of money to throw around. Dare I ask what the Sue did that the author think is 163% worse than destroying an entire city?

gunsmoke_sues January 18 2004, 00:07:21 UTC

*point* Jafar icon! =D

Maybe she's just that OMG DANGERUS!1. Or annoying.

donna_c_punk January 18 2004, 00:23:33 UTC

Dare I ask what the Sue did that the author think is 163% worse than destroying an entire city?

She exists?

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Re: *de-lurks* calluna21 January 17 2004, 17:07:14 UTC

Not nearly as racist as the Aladdin Sues whose skin is "peaches and cream, not dark like an Arab's". (Approximate quote)

silver_arm January 17 2004, 17:23:54 UTC

*Shakes head disdainfully*

This is one of the worst I've ever read. I can't find any redeeming qualities to this one at all. The characterization is painful, the writing style is elementary, everyone talks like they're in junior high, and EWWWWWWWW everyone is related. How is it that Netorie is the sister of BOTH Legato and poor, poor Wolfwood, yet doesn't look like either? Oh, except for those lovely golden eyes... *gag*

Tell me...please?" Vash was sounding curious.
NO, please DON'T

And after knowing Sue for less than a day, he's already kissing her. Give me a fricking break. It took him well over 2 years to even *hug* Meryl, and she had to follow him all over Gunsmoke and nurse him back to health and act like Rem.

" Okay. Well, I'm always being," Netorie went on
WTF is *that* supposed to mean?

This is the reason why I don't read much Trigun fanfiction nowadays. Because the vast majority of it looks like *this* sandsteamer wreck!
Oh, my poor, poor Trigun, why won't they ever leave you alone?