And somewhere in there, you mis-spelled Shuusaku as Shuusake.
Absolutely adorable, again, and I really like the development in this. It feels more like a chapter than a random event, and I think this is slowly developing into a fluff epic. Let me tell you now, I am NOT complaining. ^.^
Gah. *fixes mistakes* I'm actually amazed that I didn't make more than that. ^_^
I have the today and tomorrow off from work with nothing better to do, so I will be attempting to write more complex parts to this story, and maybe some other stuff, too. *grin* Thanks for the comments. ^_^ It's helps to have someone keeping an eye out for the mistakes that get past me and to keep saying, "Yeah. More is good. Now, where's the smex?"
Yes, the smex is coming. But, first? I think I may tackle cooking lessons. ^_^
I have seriously been distracted by this seris lately. When I see the word "go" now, I do not think of "going", but of "the game of go". This makes me a dork, but I think it helps the story because it helps me throw in these otherwise random little metaphors and such. I'm glad you appreciate them. ^_^
Akira is such a complex character in Hikago, and I've always appreciated the face that when he's with Hikaru, he stops being polite and does all of these things that show how passionate he is underneath. He's definitely chasing after Hikaru and to have moving in together presented sort of like a challenge... of course he said yes. He just didn't realize what he was in for. ^_^
You can ramble as much as you'd like. ^_^ I'm definitely fond of the comments. Also, there's nothing unhealthy about reading fanfic in the morning. Instead, there is perhaps something wrong with me attempting to write the next part before 9am. I think maybe I'll watch some Hikago for a while before attempting to write more fic. *grin* Have a good day!
I do the same thing with the word "shipping" now. It isn't "sending something", it's "liking a particular relationship in a fandom". And, you're not nuts. You're a dork. But that's not a bad thing, from one dork to another. ^_~
That was full of cute HikaAki moments. *-* I like that Akira is so normal in your fic and not alienatedteenager who doesn't know how to act around people, because I've always thought that Akira is just shy. ^^ And this talk Hikaru had with Isumi...Hikaru loves Akira soooooooo much!^^ The way Hikaru acts is so tender and caring! I curious what you will write in next part. xD I can't wait!
I think that when other people accept Akira as being more than just the guy they can never beat, then they can get along with him just fine. He's definitely shy... except around Hikaru where he started as polite, and then dropped that almost immediately. ^_^ I just utterly adore AkiHika.
I'm glad everyone likes Isumi and the conversation therein. I was chatting with svz_insanity last night about this fic and being all woobly because I based my Isumi on a guy I had a crush on in high school and wondered if that was the right thing to do... but then realized that I have a crush on Isumi for the same reasons, so it was okay. (My Hikaru is based, I realize, on the non-bastard parts of a guy I briefly dated in my freshman year of college.)
Next part will have cooking lessons. I have no qualms saying that because I already have some of the events planned and they'll be surprising enough. ^_^
OK... i read this fic 3 times over before i decided to write the comment :) This is the longest chapter of the fic-arc... BUT i can't seem to get enough... boy am i greedy :P Maybe i am just addicted to your fic? you think? [silly grin]
To write this fic while not in your best form... you had my admiration... you definitely getting better in your writing and making it more "difficult" to find words to describe your wonderful fic... without sounding like a broken record playing... i can't pinpointed on what i like about this fic... I LOVED EVERYTHING in it... reading before bed gave me enough "material" to dream my own AkiHika/HikaAki scenes... Life will be good if it continued like this [SMILES]
I keep reading back over this whole story and thinking to myself that I am obviously in love with this story, much like Hikaru is in love with Akira.
Your comments make it hard for me to reply to without repeating myself. I want to say more than just "thank you" and "that means a lot to me" because your comments are some of the best I've ever received, and I adore you for them.
I'll definitely try to make the next part something that everyone will enjoy (myself included). ^_^
Forgive me for skipping over the cooking parts. I found it to be a bit...redundant? The idea of Hikaru being sturdy was also a rather conflicting image in my mind, but it's not your fault, it's solely mine. Of all the pictures I've seen of Hikaru, the boy's a *STICK*. Touya actually has the broader shoulders in my opinion. But again, solely personal.
This was the one chapter that made me wince, mostly because I just can't picture guys saying what you're making them say here. Girls, yes, certainly. Boys...not so much. It's cute, it's fluffy, it's adorable, but I'm not picturing it here. This took away (for me) part of my enjoyment of this series, which I adore alot. Seriously.
I just hope you don't become discouraged by this, because I'm not flaming. I'm putting forth my opinions and giving you what I hope to be honest, constructive criticism.
I am definitely still looking forward to your next chapter.
I am perhaps a little guilty of having a bit of chef's blood running through my writer's veins. I love food and writing about food and I, unfortunately, probably do it too much. But, I'll try to keep it in check in the future. As far as Hikaru being "sturdy", I don't mean that he's even really stocky or anything, but I'm setting this when he and Akira are in their early twenties, and I picture Hikaru as being more muscular while Akira will have stayed relatively waif-like in comparison
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Forgot the word 'does'.
And somewhere in there, you mis-spelled Shuusaku as Shuusake.
Absolutely adorable, again, and I really like the development in this. It feels more like a chapter than a random event, and I think this is slowly developing into a fluff epic. Let me tell you now, I am NOT complaining. ^.^
And I'm still waiting for the smex. ^.~
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I have the today and tomorrow off from work with nothing better to do, so I will be attempting to write more complex parts to this story, and maybe some other stuff, too. *grin* Thanks for the comments. ^_^ It's helps to have someone keeping an eye out for the mistakes that get past me and to keep saying, "Yeah. More is good. Now, where's the smex?"
Yes, the smex is coming. But, first? I think I may tackle cooking lessons. ^_^
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Akira is such a complex character in Hikago, and I've always appreciated the face that when he's with Hikaru, he stops being polite and does all of these things that show how passionate he is underneath. He's definitely chasing after Hikaru and to have moving in together presented sort of like a challenge... of course he said yes. He just didn't realize what he was in for. ^_^
You can ramble as much as you'd like. ^_^ I'm definitely fond of the comments. Also, there's nothing unhealthy about reading fanfic in the morning. Instead, there is perhaps something wrong with me attempting to write the next part before 9am. I think maybe I'll watch some Hikago for a while before attempting to write more fic. *grin* Have a good day!
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I curious what you will write in next part. xD I can't wait!
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I'm glad everyone likes Isumi and the conversation therein. I was chatting with svz_insanity last night about this fic and being all woobly because I based my Isumi on a guy I had a crush on in high school and wondered if that was the right thing to do... but then realized that I have a crush on Isumi for the same reasons, so it was okay. (My Hikaru is based, I realize, on the non-bastard parts of a guy I briefly dated in my freshman year of college.)
Next part will have cooking lessons. I have no qualms saying that because I already have some of the events planned and they'll be surprising enough. ^_^
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This is the longest chapter of the fic-arc... BUT i can't seem to get enough... boy am i greedy :P Maybe i am just addicted to your fic? you think? [silly grin]
To write this fic while not in your best form... you had my admiration... you definitely getting better in your writing and making it more "difficult" to find words to describe your wonderful fic... without sounding like a broken record playing... i can't pinpointed on what i like about this fic... I LOVED EVERYTHING in it... reading before bed gave me enough "material" to dream my own AkiHika/HikaAki scenes... Life will be good if it continued like this [SMILES]
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Your comments make it hard for me to reply to without repeating myself. I want to say more than just "thank you" and "that means a lot to me" because your comments are some of the best I've ever received, and I adore you for them.
I'll definitely try to make the next part something that everyone will enjoy (myself included). ^_^
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Forgive me for skipping over the cooking parts. I found it to be a bit...redundant? The idea of Hikaru being sturdy was also a rather conflicting image in my mind, but it's not your fault, it's solely mine. Of all the pictures I've seen of Hikaru, the boy's a *STICK*. Touya actually has the broader shoulders in my opinion. But again, solely personal.
This was the one chapter that made me wince, mostly because I just can't picture guys saying what you're making them say here. Girls, yes, certainly. Boys...not so much. It's cute, it's fluffy, it's adorable, but I'm not picturing it here. This took away (for me) part of my enjoyment of this series, which I adore alot. Seriously.
I just hope you don't become discouraged by this, because I'm not flaming. I'm putting forth my opinions and giving you what I hope to be honest, constructive criticism.
I am definitely still looking forward to your next chapter.
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