LJIdol: 3 Strikes - Week 1 - "Black Rainbow"

[hangedkay]

“That’s the last one right there. Then we’re done.”

Blake looked down at the legalese that covered the page in small print. A million words reviewed a thousand times by a hundred attorneys in order to make sure that there were no mistakes, no omissions, no recourse. His hand trembled as he scrawled in the space that said “Patient Signature” at the

Comments

[beautyofgrey]

What an intriguing entry - I'm caught between compassion for Blake over his losses, and wondering what decisions he had to make along the way. I love the chronology of this and the cleverness of your lines of dialogue through each one. Well done!

[stellinasusan]

Very poignant story ,nicely written on a difficult theme.Well done and good luck

[mollywheezy]

Very intriguing!

[baxaphobia]

So much loss. Sigh. Well written.

[viagra]

Nicely done - I liked the format of this, dipping further backward in time until snapping back to the present at the very end. Feels like a man walking to his death rather than to something that might help his condition, remembering the big moments of hardship and death in his life, going backward to a place where he was happy, just for a moment, before accepting his fate. I enjoyed this piece a lot!