232. (fic) two

[harinezumi_kun]

title: two
rating/genre: pg; romance
pairing(s): ohmiya
words: 1,234
summary: even just a little longer, don’t say anything, just follow me.
disclaimer: FICTION.
notes: ehrmehrgerd, song-fic D: just stretching some rusty writing muscles.

Comments

[jade_lil]

you just added another fic to my long list of fic recommendations stating YOUR name.

thank you, Ma'am.

[harinezumi_kun]

aww, thanks, i'm glad you liked it ;_; ♥

[valee94]

this is sweet...
i love ohno's solo too ;////;
thank you so much for this :)

[harinezumi_kun]

thanks, it's just a really sweet song, isn't it?

thanks for reading!

[mokarran]

(Haha okay, last comment from me XD Sorry for the spam)

Yayy!! New fic from you ♥ ♥ ♥ That alone is enough to make it great, but this was really sweet (but kind of sad? Bittersweet perhaps?) and really fitting to the song (which I also really like! I believe there needs to be a lot more two Ohmiya songfic out there! :<) *cough* But yes. This fic. Pretty much the most perfect Ohmiya kiss I can imagine ♥ ♥ And just the right amount of angsty!Nino ♥

Also: I kind of feel like the song is a little disjointed (in the music/melody anyway) so maybe the jumpiness is kind of fitting? XD Well anyway, I don't mind it not being chronological ♥

[hontowa]

Jumping in with this comment because I totally agree about how the song feels a little disjointed. I mentioned before that I wasn't a huge fan of this song at first, but it grew on me a LOT and now it has even more reason to grow on me because it's associated with a lovely fic from you! ♥

But yes, I think the nature of the fic fits with the feel of the song quite nicely. I think a lot of songfics just throw in lyrics in the header (*ahem*... I SO would never do that, as you know 8D), but this story does a lot more with the song, interweaving it in the story. Welcome back? ♥

[harinezumi_kun]

thank you! ♥ i don't know what it is, but i just loved this song from the get-go, so naturally a fic was born from it XD; and of course i'm glad you enjoyed it, too :)

[harinezumi_kun]

(ngl, loving the comment spam :D ♥)

you know, i never really thought about it that way, but yeah, i guess the song is a bit disconnected. when i was writing this, it just felt more appropriate to have the parts kind of out of order. but i'm glad it worked out!

and girl, don't even get me started on song-fic ;p

[rinalin]

I think this is utterly brilliant. I love the mishmash of moments out of order. I love how each section begins in lower case, it feels so much like Ohno somehow. I love how the uncertainty and the need are just so overpowering.

[harinezumi_kun]

ha ha, i'm so glad someone actually noticed the lowercase! i was debating about leaving it in there, so i'm glad you liked it! it just felt right to me, too.

thanks for reading!

[neko_kirin3104]

I think what made this fiction so effective is the order you've put the events in. Reading it from the beginning, the disjointed scenes gave the impression of Ohno recollecting a past memory, or imagining how he wanted things to happen. But when I got to the bottom, everything just starts falling into place. This is a beautiful fiction that lends itself to different interpretations, depending on how one reads it through.And all the emotions you were trying to convey through the characters just resonated through the words.

I actually read the scenes again, this time in order... and somehow, it brought a different light to the story. This is like reading two fics in one. I am absolutely in-love with this! Thanks very much for sharing! ♥

[harinezumi_kun]

thank you, this comment is so lovely! ;_;

i never even thought about having two different readings! i'm glad you were able to enjoy it, and find the different aspects of it :)