Comments | hd_flashfic: Knee Deep by Naomi

asyndeta in hd_flashfic

Knee Deep by Naomi

Feb 01, 2006 15:25

Title: Knee Deep
Author: naomi_noelle
Words: 545
Rating: PG-13 for language and vague sexual references

( 'Well, through years of careful inbreeding and organised crime, we have enough money to buy ourselves an enormous mansion.' )

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Comments 20

bittersplendor February 1 2006, 16:23:21 UTC

Hee. That was so fun. I'd quote, but I loved everything, so yeah. Thank you for this. :)

asyndeta February 1 2006, 16:25:01 UTC

♥ Thanks! Glad you liked it.

thekams February 1 2006, 16:56:27 UTC

Haha...this is awesome! So funny =D

asyndeta February 1 2006, 21:11:43 UTC

Thank you!

physixxx February 1 2006, 19:01:52 UTC

WONDERFUL!!!

I love dialogue-only stories when it's done right!

When it's done in a way that you don't NEED visual narrative... you don't NEED to be told what they are doing and HOW they are doing it...

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:fuckin' aces:

asyndeta February 1 2006, 21:12:29 UTC

I'm happy you like it! This is the first dialogue-only fic that I've written, so I'm pleased it turned out for the best. :)

lyttlelucyfer February 1 2006, 19:11:34 UTC

Very very cool. I loved the way the tone suggests they are just arguing for the hell of it.

Phantom toe. Heh!

asyndeta February 1 2006, 21:13:42 UTC

Thanks. :) You totally know that several generations of Malfoys spent their formative years in St Mungo's having toes removed and webbed fingers separated, heh.

talanoa February 1 2006, 19:23:18 UTC

I really enjoyed this. :)

It was very funny, and subtle. I like the little moments that hints at a shared and larger backstory, showing these characters have a life outside of your story.

“I distinctly remember that you swore never to speak of that again.”

“Doesn’t sound like something I’d say. Besides, I haven’t mentioned how your phantom toe does seem to have developed into an erogenous-”

My favourite bit. :) Hee, I got the impression that the eleventh toe probably came up sometime during sex, and that Harry, under duress, promised whatever Draco dictated, but that he'll cheerfully ignore his promise anyway.

I also loved the bit about the kraken, and this last bit of dialogue and how telling it is about their relationship:

“Potter, if you’re trying to make a point, then do it before I hex you.”

“I just don’t like all the dragons.”

“Then we’ll get rid of them. Happy?”

asyndeta February 1 2006, 21:14:50 UTC

Thank you for the lovely long review. ♥ It's always good to know what bits in particular people like.