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Team AU: 20. Close your eyes and think of Hogwarts.

Apr 06, 2009 14:21

Title: primum mobile, or ten forgotten things
Team: AU, baby!
Author: kirinin
Prompt: 20. Close your eyes and think of Hogwarts.
Wordcount: just over 4,000
Rating: PG
Warnings: None, really.
Summary: The truth: logic isn't in the lump in his throat, in his stuttering pulse. He needs the certainty of his name on someone else's lips, which means he needs ( Read more... )

team au, prompt: 20. close your eyes, pg, fic, round ii

Comments 124

tomatoe18 April 6 2009, 14:17:33 UTC

I've no words. Just in awe and overwhelmed by it all - the atmosphere, the sequence, the conversations, the sense of loss. WOW. (This is a good reaction, by the way, I just don't know how to put it in words.)

kirinin April 6 2009, 15:57:14 UTC

Thank you so much! Your overwhelm overwhelms. :D

-K

curia_regis April 6 2009, 14:19:39 UTC

This is so eerie and so beautiful. I loved how you showed them slowly losing their memories.

kirinin April 6 2009, 15:57:30 UTC

Thanks for the review! Glad you enjoyed it. ;)

-K

sugareey April 6 2009, 14:42:18 UTC

This is amazing. It flows so beautifully, like a poem and I love how used embraced this prompt. The gradual losing of everything, a world that they once knew, and only having each other. And than actually just sticking with each other just because. It's sad but touching that the only thing they really can remember are each other.

Nicely well done, dear! Yayy!

kirinin April 6 2009, 15:58:00 UTC

Squee! Thanks for the review, sugareey. I'm glad you liked it!

-K

nonajf April 6 2009, 15:41:20 UTC

Very well done! As things disappear and they are frantic, it seems so sad and horrific that they'd lose everything. But as they lose their memories, it begins to seem a blessing. No Voldemort, no evil to fight.

kirinin April 6 2009, 15:58:17 UTC

Exactly. Thanks for the review! :)

-K

lttlelola April 6 2009, 16:50:25 UTC

no voldemort, no evil, that's good yes, but no friends, no family, thats not good.

i really do want a sequal. something to explain it all, get them back to their world, and of course keep them together.

kirinin April 6 2009, 16:57:38 UTC

The initial ending I had in mind was very different from how the story turned out in the end. Sometimes it's hard to know when, precisely to stop writing.

I think if I were to write another story in this 'verse, it would have additional complications rather than be an 'epilogue'.

So, the answer is maybe?

Thanks for reading and reviewing,

-K

lttlelola April 6 2009, 17:07:08 UTC

i understand that. it shouldn't be so simple as "we're back, it's over, happily ever after" i just meant that with more complications they could find a way back, and with a few more, find the happiness in their world that they had in the messed up world.

kirinin April 6 2009, 17:26:50 UTC

Definitely food for thought. :)

-K