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Team AU: 20. Close your eyes and think of Hogwarts.

Apr 06, 2009 14:21

Title: primum mobile, or ten forgotten things
Team: AU, baby!
Author: kirinin
Prompt: 20. Close your eyes and think of Hogwarts.
Wordcount: just over 4,000
Rating: PG
Warnings: None, really.
Summary: The truth: logic isn't in the lump in his throat, in his stuttering pulse. He needs the certainty of his name on someone else's lips, which means he needs ( Read more... )

team au, prompt: 20. close your eyes, pg, fic, round ii

Comments 124

smirking_muse April 6 2009, 19:49:39 UTC

Oh, wow. That was really fascinating. I was incredibly intrigued by the whole idea- it’s very clever and creative! I really liked how the premise and that they started working together. They were almost hauntingly mysterious with all the vanishing magical items- and I am still dead curious about what the letter from Petunia was about (and if it was even from Petunia?). I think I am going to have to read this one again, just to try and see if I can gather anything else from it- you have a wonderful mysterious story here. I loved the last line too- it’s very romantic and lovely. Well done!

kirinin April 6 2009, 23:04:17 UTC

I'm glad you liked the fic. It may be one of those stories that requires more than one reading?

Thanks for the review! :)

-K

el_em_en_oh_pee April 6 2009, 20:52:20 UTC

I hate that I can't vote in the poll, because I really want to give you top marks on absolutely everything. This fic was perfect and beautiful and amazing (so well-executed in such a small amount of space!), and it totally blew me away. I really love it and it is going straightaway onto my list of favorites. ♥ well done!

kirinin April 6 2009, 23:09:00 UTC

I've been wishing I could vote, too - it's very frustrating, isn't it? (I'd be honest!)

But I'm so happy you enjoyed the story that much! Thanks for your review. :)

-K

spacefragments April 6 2009, 21:00:05 UTC

i think haunting is the only word for this. or misty, dreamlike, eerie. harry trying to remember hermione's face broke my heart. i love how the gradual losing of the memories almost feels like relief in the end, like freedom. but a freedom that comes with a great price.

amazing work!

kirinin April 6 2009, 23:09:37 UTC

Wow, you got what I was going for! I'm really glad. Thanks so much for your review, I appreciate you taking the time. :)

-K

stellamoon April 6 2009, 23:14:18 UTC

Wow, I just loved this! fabulous job. I loved the feeling of dreamy inevitability.

kirinin April 7 2009, 01:46:14 UTC

Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)

-K

bite_me_luv April 6 2009, 23:40:22 UTC

*blinks*

Oh, wow. That was.. different? Eerie? I still don't know how to describe what I feel. This is something that will stay with me for a while, that's for sure. I'm a sucker for happy endings with tied-up lose threads normally - but I understand that this one had to end right. there. (as you explained). Art itself is lost on me.. but the artistic value of story-telling is something I adore. And it is some sort of happy ending, after all..

Ah, well, I'm rambling.. I'll leave it at that: I shy away from AU normally - but this one here: really, really good :)

kirinin April 7 2009, 01:56:06 UTC

Thank you so much for your review! One of the best compliments ever begins with "I usually don't like..." ;)

As for the ending, at first I wanted to make things more cut-and-dried, but I realized that I could not end the story so happily without some major deus ex machina. Still, I'm also a sucker for happy endings, so I couldn't leave the story on the same *note* as the rest of the fic. So it ended happily without resolving anything? Yes. ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed the fic!

-K