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Team Epilogue: 15. He who can, does. He who can't, teaches the Dark Arts.

Apr 28, 2009 14:28

Title: We Flood Empty Lakes
Team: Epilogue
Author: turningleft
Prompt: 15. He who can, does. He who can't, teaches the Dark Arts.
Wordcount: ~4700
Rating: R
Warnings: Angst, darkfic, dystopia, Epilogue-compliant, mindfuck, non-linear narrative, highly non-traditional/experimental structure, pretentious prose, postwar, profanity, references to canon ( Read more... )

r, fic, team epilogue, prompt: 15. he who can does, round ii

Comments 30

katerina_black May 3 2009, 08:55:12 UTC

Very satisfying. :D I thought the format worked very well, and you gave just enough detail to keep us engaged, but not enough to bring about closure. Well done!

6shotamericano May 3 2009, 16:44:10 UTC

I absolutely loved this. It takes a very precise touch to carry off a second person narrative, and you've nailed it. I love your use of non-linear structure - another thing that's very hard to do well. Beautiful work!

auselysium May 4 2009, 16:36:34 UTC

This is stunning.

The pace, formatting and style. I just adore it. This is the type of writing that draws you in and makes you remember. Because it is different, and in your case, incredibly successful.

Congratulations and thank you so much for writing this gorgeous fic.

pervyunitwins May 7 2009, 06:28:20 UTC

That was intense and calming and somehow flowed well. You could have taken made this into a really confusing fic, but that did not happen. Until the end that is. What is it all a dream? The parts that worked as explanations were very intense, but then I felt like the actual dialogue and the 'action' worked to calm the intensity and slow things down narrowing the perspective to what was just happening in that section. Then the reader tried to think back to what had already come.

I do not know if I effectively explained what I wanted to. However, it was indeed a mindfuck and a bit of shock when Draco ended up dead. There was always and underlying theme of obsession, Harry's for the stone, Harry's for Draco and Harry's obsession for Draco melding with his obsession for the stone.

The end was a bit of surprise. Was it all a dream? The structure was also very interesting. I did like the fic, even thought it was very, very different from anything I have ever read. Great job. I think everything you wanted to come across was

szefi May 10 2009, 13:13:11 UTC

Interesting story:)