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eponinesyndrome October 17 2010, 17:23:52 UTC
We loved each other once. We were beautiful once. Before age and real responsibility and life got in the way. When you drove your cruiser and I still rode my horses. When you got jealous at all the guys who would look me up and down on Sunset Boulevard, and I would tease you for never wearing a proper shirt under your blazer. When these things were endearing and sweet. When we could still learn new things about each other, and everything was wonderful and exciting. Before your hair line started to recede. Before we stopped flirting. When we would find any excuse to touch- to be together. Before we found any reason to be on our own. When we were young and beautiful, and so very much in love. Before everything slowly turned sour.

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bestthingaround October 18 2010, 02:22:29 UTC
I love the epistolary point of view in this. wonderful characterization :)

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eponinesyndrome October 18 2010, 04:15:21 UTC
thank you!

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alasse_c October 18 2010, 02:27:30 UTC
A beautiful piece that really captures the emotions of time passing, things changing and what ultimately eventuates.

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alasse_c October 18 2010, 02:46:27 UTC
The name of the cafe is unimportant. Its only significance is that it can hide us where eyes cannot see or so James tells me. I try to look nonchalant, observing the flow of people coming in and out. Each time the chime announces a new patron, I hold my breath, praying it’s not someone we know ( ... )

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eponinesyndrome October 18 2010, 04:15:00 UTC
woooooooooah! very interesting! beautiful people and dangerous situations! intriguing piece!

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alasse_c October 19 2010, 01:54:27 UTC
Thanks! I love picture prompts.

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stopmotionscene October 24 2010, 07:41:28 UTC
She: I am five parts Belarusian and three parts Estonian, with traces of Iceland and Ireland and India in my blood. I have French-thin bones. I have thick Spanish hair. My bloodline trickles down from Athena and Aphrodite, Minerva and Venus, Greece and Italy. I wear my skin like a cotton dress from Israel most days. At night, I wear it like a silk robe from Lebanon. The gypsy in me smooths out my voice while the Egyptian in me straightens my spine. When I grow up, I’ll be a bullfighter like my bisabuelo in Argentina. I'll be a great scientist like my oma in Germany. The world can claim me and I can claim the world and I am partly everyone’s to own.

He: Sounds good to me, sweetheart. As long as you are also partly mine.

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bestthingaround October 24 2010, 21:10:18 UTC
so gorgeous. beautiful language choice and so wonderfully descriptive. And I like that I can get a dynamic of the relationship just from this.

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stopmotionscene October 24 2010, 22:29:08 UTC
thanks so much! yet another gorgeous prompt. ♥

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eponinesyndrome December 15 2010, 08:15:43 UTC
this is absolutely beautiful. so, so lovely.

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