152 my ideal world

[hellodolleh]

the quiet world by jeffrey mcdaniel

In an effort to get people to look
into each other’s eyes more,
the government has decided to allot
each person exactly one hundred
and sixty-seven words, per day.

When the phone rings, I put it
to my ear without saying hello.
In the restaurant I point
at chicken noodle soup. I am
adjusting well to the new way.

Late at

Comments

[k5memo]

that made me pee a little. no joke. so bloody sweet. damn.

[hellodolleh]

yay! i showed my friend, bev, and she said, "tsk so sad. he's lover doesnt love him." hahahah but yeah, so sweet. i actually think that'd be an ideal world. where we dont talk too much. hmm

[k5memo]

it depends on how you look at it, really.
yes she used up all of her words, which may imply that he is not of so much significance to him. at least she stayed on the line to hear him breathe? i think she loves him back.

in an ideal world. we'll skip all the condescending talk. and reserve our words only to those that matter. romantic.

[hellodolleh]

yes, i think she loves him back too. in a twisted way, i teared a little when i read it. i like how you described your ideal world. no, i love it, actually.

[offhandedly]

You posted this up before right? Just a small snippet... right

[hellodolleh]

nah, that was mad world by gary jules. a song, love. quiet world. ideal world. word.