Where Do We Go (2/2)

[her_pseudonym]

Title: Where Do We Go (2/2)
Pairing: Lightman/Foster
Rating: NC-17
Summary: A man from Cal's past is bent on revenge and finds it during one late night at the Lightman Group building. Will his actions drive Cal and Gillian apart, or will they find a way to move forward together?
CONTENT WARNING: This story deals with dark themes and

Comments

[topaz_eyes]

I first read this on ff.net, but I am so thrilled to see it here so I can comment properly. :-)

The first part was absolutely harrowing. I didn't want to read it, but I couldn't help it. This is meant as a compliment, because you portrayed the horror of it so very well. Then with the aftermath in the second part, you kept the focus on the emotion, on dealing with the trauma.

Er, do you accept concrit at all? Let me know either way?

[her_pseudonym]

Thanks for taking the time to comment here.

I'll accept any comments. To be perfectly honest, I've published four novels in my non-anonymous writing life, so I'm very used to receiving constructive criticism (and the occasional bad review! lol). I've gotten pretty good at taking the helpful comments and using them to improve. I'm deadly serious about writing, and accepting criticism is a huge part of improving one's craft. Fire away. ;)

[yazizzle33]

I'm in tears right now. Really, this amazing piece of art brought me to tears and I'm not the type to cry from a story, but this was just so heartbreakingly beautiful and hopeful and everything one could ask for with a story such as this. Your courage in posting this is incredible and I applaud you for not only writing this but for sharing it with us. Truly incredible writing, so in character it hurt to read, and wow. Adding to my memories right now and friending you as well because WOW.

[her_pseudonym]

Wow is right! I'm humbled to have written something that affected you so much, and am flattered to have it labeled "art". Thank you. It was pretty scary to post it, but I'm really glad I did. Knowing that someone enjoyed it as much as it sounds like you did really helps me remember to be brave about my work. Thank you.

[yazizzle33]

I was as surprised as you were that I got so emotional during it, but like I said before it's testament to your great story telling. &hearts And of course it's art! :D Anything as great as this and can instill so much emotion is art, for sure. ;)
Aww, you're welcome and I hope you keep posting your fantastic ideas! I'd be honored to read them all. :D

[sum_of_one]

THAT! ... i'm SO sorry i'm lousy with words, but just wanted to say i agree with yazi here, this just got me all, well, broken inside.
you dragged me into your world with this story, couldn't help but feel it for 'em, i don't even want to ruin the feeling reading something happy now. i really got me.
in longest time haven't read something that tore me like this.
sorry for lack of words, can't describe it better...
*puts story to memories* ... *sighs*

[wickedground]

This must be one of the best fanfics I have ever read...in any fandom/of any pairing. I'm speechless. There is so much power in your writing and the raw emotions you portrayed felt so real that sometimes I wanted to look away, but couldn't. Absolutely amazing, wow.

Cal's thoughts during their shower/love making totally reminded me of the last scene of Honey, like Cal's behaviour when he went to Gillian's house (when he invaded her space and went out again, not sure what to do with himself) was totally reflected in this story, just taken a step further (obviously, considering what triggered it).

And damn you, you write amazing smut I have to say. I am so not used to read het smut and this is just breathtaking.

[her_pseudonym]

Damn, you opened with a pretty incredible compliment. Thank you so much!

I adore the last scene of Honey. I think there is so much unspoken there, so much to be read from the body language and the subtext. I definitely draw on that scene for inspiration as far as their relationship and who they are as people. I'm really happy to hear that you felt like this story was true to the characters as established in the show. That's definitely my aim.

LOL...and thanks for the comments about my smut-writing. Honestly, smut is kind of my thing. It's hard for me to write stuff that doesn't have those elements...but mostly because I don't think of sex as a purely physical act, and am fascinated by what those moments say about the characters sharing them. And...I like to read smut. Nothing lofty about that. :D

[starfirefic]

Hey there - I'm really glad you posted this somewhere I could comment - I went and read it on FF.net after reading and loving Late Nights, and I'm not in the slightest surprised to discover you have a non-fic writing career, given the calibre of your writing in both fics.

This one is another amazingly-written piece: you write "harrowing" extremely well, and then you go on to write "sweet" beautifully too. My one piece of concrit (well, I mean it as concrit anyway - I hope it comes out that way) is that for me personally, the "sweet" comes way too quickly after the "harrowing".

My feeling as that, after what they went through, I can absolutely see Cal & Gillian trying to deal with it in the way they have in Part 2, and I can even see what they do going on to partially heal some of the damage that had been done earlier in the evening. But I can't quite buy the full healing I read it as being written as - for me, that's too much, too soon. (Incidentally, I can also see Torres going off to have some kind of anonymous sex, just to

[her_pseudonym]

Thanks so much for your comments. I really appreciate that you took the time to share your thoughts.

I understand your concerns about the timeframe, and it was definitely something I thought about. To be honest I didn't really intend for the ending to signal that everything was all right and resolved and forgotten, as much as I wanted to end on a note of hope that everything would be all right. I completely see that if it's taken as "all better now", it feels too fast. Realistically I see them all dealing with the fallout for some time after the events of the story, but, honestly, I wanted to write a one-shot. lol. But in my mind, I see issues raised by that night coming up for Cal and Gillian in the future, perhaps in ways they could never anticipate (hey...maybe a thought for a future one-shot).

And never fear...in my interpretation of these characters, Cal likes to talk dirty. Because with that accent, he'd damn well better. ;)

Thanks again for your comments. I do appreciate them.

[eglvm]

Oh. My. God.
I have loved this story so much. You handled the reality of it all so well. You are truly in tune with these characters.
If only the last half could come true. Seriously, that would be so beautiful.
This was just...guh. There are no words. Just...THIS.

[her_pseudonym]

Thank you...I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. And am humbled by your inability to find words. ;)