Re: 52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 5b/?
anonymous
January 26 2010, 11:15:52 UTC
She sniffles and wipes the budding tears under her eyes, blinking a few times.
“Vanya, I do not want to return to Russia,” she croaks. “I’m a single 29 year old woman-pathetic even for American standards. They’ll probably have a husband for me before I get to baggage claim.”
“When Tetya Olga was your age, she didn’t have a husband either,” Natalya says, nudging the now cold pizza away from her.
“Tetya Olga died when she was 25 and the whole family was trying to marry her off,” Katushka spits back. “Even Prababushka Braginskaya, and she was 98 years old.” She turns to her brother. “And you, Ivan. If you take as much as a step in the borders of Russia, you’ll be dead
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Re: 52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 5b/?
anonymous
February 2 2010, 08:04:00 UTC
Prabushka sounds about right. Though my Great Grandmother who's kind of Russian(seriously it's confusing to explain) always had me call her grandma. But something seems off when you used Katushka. The diminutive from of Yekatarina is Katyusha, and I for soe reason get the feeling that Katushka is the Rude form... though I could be off and it ould be the affectionate form... I have no relatives named Yekaterina so I only know for sure what my grandfather calls my sister and I for sure (our cousins and half siblings didn't get Russian names)
Anyway I'm really enjoying this fill so far and I encourrage you to continue on with it! You've got Colorado Springs, Russians, and the Airforce Academy.... three things oddly important in my life lol so I am sitting her pressing F5 unable to keep myself under control <3
late response is late...sorry ^__^;;
anonymous
February 10 2010, 09:12:51 UTC
Ah! Shoot! Yes, that's sounds right. I'll make sure to change "Katushka" to "Katyusha" in the next installment.
Now I'm curious as to your background! :) Yeah, I'm having fun writing this and I intend on finishing it too. I'm kinda flaky with updates though, so please be patient! :B
52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 6a/?
anonymous
February 12 2010, 13:47:35 UTC
To the readers from the first part: I'm not usually a standoffish jerk. Even if I don't reply, I've read and appreciated your comments.
The next two installments are a bit longer, and they're mostly back story. I'll be getting into more of "slice of life at USAFA" in part 7 and we'll be introduced to some awesome characters in part 7 too, if you catch my drift. Thanks again for reading and keeping up with my really slow updates.
52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 6b/?
anonymous
February 12 2010, 13:49:37 UTC
Amie is invited to the wedding of course, though when she told Mrs. Bonnefoy what she was to wear, the older woman nearly had an aneurism. Amie has never spent summers in Milan or Paris. She can’t tell you the difference between Armani cotton and Wal-Mart cotton other than three grand. She wears no jewelry other than her class ring, which she won’t take off until she replaces it with the sleek Academy ring at Ring Dance, if she decides to go. This, according to Mrs. Bonnefoy, will simply not do
( ... )
52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 6c/?
anonymous
February 12 2010, 13:52:08 UTC
Amie chuckles. “Yeah, I guess. But he’s not going to pass it on to the next generation. We Kirklands are all the same. Work, work, work.” She zips up the dress on the side and smoothes the material in front. A deep breath. She steps outside.
“Well?” Amie asks, holding her arms out, a nervous grin. “What do you think?”
Mrs. Bonnefoy does not squeal or grin. Her graceful finger taps her cheek and her eyes squint. She walks around Amie, examining the girl as if she were a museum article. She hmms thoughtfully, not the reaction Amie had hoped. “The color’s wrong.” And it’s like letting the air out of a tire, hiss and all; Amie’s shoulders sag. She was hoping they’d find one and that’d be it. Mrs. Bonnefoy shoos her back in the dressing room and tells Amie to change back.
They continue to look for that dress. That dress that will make a blind man see and the lame walk. Mrs. Bonnefoy’s looking for a miracle. Amie’s looking for clothes
( ... )
52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 7a/?
anonymous
February 12 2010, 14:11:42 UTC
7They opened at nine. It’s almost four o’clock. They’ve had three costumers. One was looking for directions to the Academy. One needed a bathroom. One contemplated violets for his wife, but was rushed out by a phone call about “an accident, come home now
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52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 7b/?
anonymous
February 12 2010, 14:12:32 UTC
He learned better English. Got a job. Dated a girl. Lost a girl. He continued to smoke. Made money. Quit his job. Saw a place off of Powers for rent and four hundred a month. Ivan thought of his rose stand on the street corner in New York, and opened a flower shop. He was right next to a formal dress shop, so figured business would come to him
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Re: 52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 7b/?
anonymous
February 12 2010, 17:22:21 UTC
I don't think I've commented on this one but OMG so much love. The characters and the universe you've created for them is so rich and textured and REAL. That's always the biggest compliment I give people because it's such a hard thing for people to achieve and you've done it wonderfully here.
Can't wait for these two to meet and to read more of this fabulous story.
Re: 52 Sunflowers for Ivan Braginski 7b/?
anonymous
February 13 2010, 16:14:14 UTC
Gorgeous fill anon love the characters to bits!
You should post this up at the Fills List to let people know you've updated it...it makes me sad that it hasn't gotten more comments... :-( (And afraid you might discontinue it which would make me most sad indeed...)
Does OP mind fem!America?
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“Vanya, I do not want to return to Russia,” she croaks. “I’m a single 29 year old woman-pathetic even for American standards. They’ll probably have a husband for me before I get to baggage claim.”
“When Tetya Olga was your age, she didn’t have a husband either,” Natalya says, nudging the now cold pizza away from her.
“Tetya Olga died when she was 25 and the whole family was trying to marry her off,” Katushka spits back. “Even Prababushka Braginskaya, and she was 98 years old.” She turns to her brother. “And you, Ivan. If you take as much as a step in the borders of Russia, you’ll be dead ( ... )
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Anyway I'm really enjoying this fill so far and I encourrage you to continue on with it! You've got Colorado Springs, Russians, and the Airforce Academy.... three things oddly important in my life lol so I am sitting her pressing F5 unable to keep myself under control <3
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Now I'm curious as to your background! :) Yeah, I'm having fun writing this and I intend on finishing it too. I'm kinda flaky with updates though, so please be patient! :B
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I love it, as always. The whole family interaction felt very natural and real. Take your time with the next part, I'll be patiently waiting! :)
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don't worry about late responses. I feel your pain
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The next two installments are a bit longer, and they're mostly back story. I'll be getting into more of "slice of life at USAFA" in part 7 and we'll be introduced to some awesome characters in part 7 too, if you catch my drift. Thanks again for reading and keeping up with my really slow updates.
6Colorado is cold ( ... )
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“Well?” Amie asks, holding her arms out, a nervous grin. “What do you think?”
Mrs. Bonnefoy does not squeal or grin. Her graceful finger taps her cheek and her eyes squint. She walks around Amie, examining the girl as if she were a museum article. She hmms thoughtfully, not the reaction Amie had hoped. “The color’s wrong.” And it’s like letting the air out of a tire, hiss and all; Amie’s shoulders sag. She was hoping they’d find one and that’d be it. Mrs. Bonnefoy shoos her back in the dressing room and tells Amie to change back.
They continue to look for that dress. That dress that will make a blind man see and the lame walk. Mrs. Bonnefoy’s looking for a miracle. Amie’s looking for clothes ( ... )
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Can't wait for these two to meet and to read more of this fabulous story.
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Thank you so much!
Haha, when these two meet, it's gonna be like dynamite baby. ;)
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You should post this up at the Fills List to let people know you've updated it...it makes me sad that it hasn't gotten more comments... :-( (And afraid you might discontinue it which would make me most sad indeed...)
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Oh, wait, what? You're supposed to put updates on there too???
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This intrigues me.
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