Underneath [1/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 04:17:33 UTC
Original request from part 7: http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/10960.html?thread=19686864#t19686864. Anon!author wasn't sure about which names to use, so she went with the country names. Also, did not manage smut, alas. But I hope this satisfies otherwise!Initially, England had blamed the economy. Granted, the current economic conditions were all America's fault to begin with, but England could still understand the younger nation being tense because of it. It wasn't as though America was acting particularly different, anyway. He was just a little less loud, a little less boisterous, and England actually appreciated the change. It made the meetings considerably less irritating
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Underneath [2/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 05:13:31 UTC
Fail!anon is a failure. The AN for the first part should not be struck-through >.< In case it's affected by the strike, the original request HTML is this: http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/10960.html?thread=19686864#t19686864"Things between myself and America are fine, Angleterre," France said. "No need to worry about him losing an ally here
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Underneath [3/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 05:14:47 UTC
But England couldn't let it go. The look in America's eyes in that moment...it reminded him of scorched earth, of the sky during The Blitz, of being all alone in the middle of the night and a thousand other things he couldn't articulate. It made him angry that he couldn't articulate it, angry and slightly nervous that his former colony, his America, could be invoking those feelings.
With all that in mind, he went to visit Japan, hoping for some more insight.
"Has he been acting strange?" England asked, gratefully accepting some tea. "You two are friends. Has he mentioned anything being wrong?"
"What do you mean by strange, England-san?" Japan asked, quirking his head to the side.
"Just...different." Crazy, he mentally added
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Oh damn, I've never seen anybody take this kind of approach with kind of yandere!America; I've never see it done with anything but Russia/America/Russia and/or the Cold War era. And frankly, I've never seen it done this well before.
This is a really good start already, anon; I had to reread it a couple of times already for all the little details. I love how England starts out dismissing France's subtly off reactions, and his denial about America caring for him is so canon it makes me laugh. His description of the look in America's eyes is actually a little chilling, though. The look in America's eyes in that moment...it reminded him of scorched earth, of the sky during The Blitz, of being all alone in the middle of the night and a thousand other things he couldn't articulate. I really like that bleak, desolate imagery there.
All of the little descriptions weave in together quite well to form a slightly ... twitch-inducing and increasingly unnerving perspective on America's darker side. France's comment -- "He was always
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Re: Underneath [3/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 12:05:37 UTC
Wow, very promising, I really liked this. There are a couple of sentences that are really beautiful here, and you managed to convey the sense of uneasiness and wariness England's feeling. France's reaction and later conversation with England were very IC and very good; Japan's tale was very unsettling, excellent job. I'm liking the dark posessiveness and violent impulses a lot. I'm absolutely thrilled at Russia's dark smile "like seeing an old friend"; I bet he'd have a lot of things to say to England if he asked about what's going on I'm also really intrigued by the fact that they are not even together...makes me wonder what will happen if America's desires take the better of him...
Underneath [4/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 13:58:50 UTC
Wow, thank you, anons for the comments! :D They made my day. Also, fail!anon!author fails again, since I forgot to change the chapter title and then posted. Ignore that stray chapter?But England was fast running out of other people he could talk to about whatever the hell it was he'd seen in America's eyes. He couldn't just go door to door and ask everyone if they'd seen America act strangely. It would get back to America, first of all, and it was something England was feeling increasingly private about. But he had to know. And so, having run out of reasonably friendly faces, England turned to Russia
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Underneath [5/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 17:47:35 UTC
"So what is it that you want to know about America?" Russia asked, once they were both seated in what England thought might be a study of some kind. It was dark, there were books everywhere, and swords hung on the walls. It did not lend a comforting air to the conversation
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Underneath [6/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 18:16:03 UTC
England had no idea what to say to that. None of it made sense, none of it seemed possible. How could America, silly, sweet America, have done any of what Russia was claiming? It was impossible to reconcile his memories of a laughing little boy with the lunatic Russia was describing
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Re: Underneath [6/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 22:07:21 UTC
Holy crap. I really love your writing and imagery with this, especially Russia's memory during the Cold War of America.. Much much kudos. I can't wait to read more. ♥
Re: Underneath [6/?]
anonymous
April 12 2010, 22:10:50 UTC
Great job anon! I just discovered this fic today! Hope you update soon! I was getting a bit sad when the USUK section hasn't updated for awhile. I loved the last line.
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With all that in mind, he went to visit Japan, hoping for some more insight.
"Has he been acting strange?" England asked, gratefully accepting some tea. "You two are friends. Has he mentioned anything being wrong?"
"What do you mean by strange, England-san?" Japan asked, quirking his head to the side.
"Just...different." Crazy, he mentally added ( ... )
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*eagerly waits for more*
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This is a really good start already, anon; I had to reread it a couple of times already for all the little details. I love how England starts out dismissing France's subtly off reactions, and his denial about America caring for him is so canon it makes me laugh. His description of the look in America's eyes is actually a little chilling, though. The look in America's eyes in that moment...it reminded him of scorched earth, of the sky during The Blitz, of being all alone in the middle of the night and a thousand other things he couldn't articulate. I really like that bleak, desolate imagery there.
All of the little descriptions weave in together quite well to form a slightly ... twitch-inducing and increasingly unnerving perspective on America's darker side. France's comment -- "He was always ( ... )
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Author!Anon, this is just lovely and delicious. Like dark chocolate.
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I'm also really intrigued by the fact that they are not even together...makes me wonder what will happen if America's desires take the better of him...
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Anyway, I'm stalking your story. Keep up the good work! XD
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And yay story stalking!
-Anon!Author
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And so did this anon.
I'm loving this. I'm stalking this! It's wonderful!
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I really love your writing and imagery with this, especially Russia's memory during the Cold War of America..
Much much kudos. I can't wait to read more. ♥
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Also, England try to listen what ppl are telling to you~~
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