Sweet Child Of mine- Prolog
anonymous
June 13 2010, 06:01:09 UTC
So there you go. I said Sunday and Sunday it is. Prolog and a first chapter, without a beta, in spite of my will- no one will take it…. so, sorry for any mistakes in grammar, spelling or typos
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Sweet Child Of mine- 1 (2/4)
anonymous
June 13 2010, 06:05:50 UTC
Yes, maybe he was a bright-eyed innocent fool. But the world has changed before because of bright-eyed fools with big dreams. If he'll fail- at least he could honestly said he tried his best. Thank god- bravery wasn't his problem (lack of sense for boundaries and where being brave become plain stupid were, as he was told by the caretakers so many times). He smiled. Well, sometimes you just have to charge into a fight with three bigger boys for a kitten. He saved the poor thing, and never mind that broken arm. He was so happy with his fluffy companion- he called her Hedwig, because how royally-looking and acting was that cat. A soft, nostalgic smile landed on his lips. There he is, about to walk right into the fight of the big boys once more
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Sweet Child Of mine- 1 (3/3)
anonymous
June 13 2010, 06:10:08 UTC
If Tomasz wasn't overwhelmed before, now he was. More then calming his nerves, his kind and still anonymous boss pictured him stuck doing secretary work for the rest of his life in this mess…. He had begun to develop a nervous stomach ach
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Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 1 (3/3)
anonymous
June 13 2010, 14:25:14 UTC
But his personal favorite was the story were they were a couple of secret agents, fighting crimes around the world- living undercover, risking their lives- and always thinking of him, as they wrote in the letter. This sounds so much like child thinking, it made me go d'awww.
I like this Tomasz guy, idealists are sweet. You're good with characterization, and I like the image of the chaotic office building and the setting in general. There are some minor mistakes, but I understand what you write with no problem - I'd offer to beta myself, but I'm not a native speaker (and I'm neck deep in schoolwork anyway - I shouldn't even be here ;_;)
Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 1 (3/3)
anonymous
June 13 2010, 16:07:17 UTC
B-Bawwww ;___; Anon, I'm in love with your fill! Really, it's very sweet and lovely <3 And since LietPol is my OTP this is one of the best and lovely things I've ever read! Keep writing it, Tomasz is such a sweet guy <3 I can't wait for him to meet one of his parents. I'll also wonder who he will find first, since both of them have green eyes xD Anyway, I'll be looking for this! Go, Anon, go!
Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 1 (3/3)
anonymous
June 14 2010, 18:50:41 UTC
Omigawd, that was so adorable. It totally made me d'aw, especially when Tomosz knows that his parents care for him and all . . . my heart totally goes out to the family. ;_; Poor Lithuania and Poland, not being able to take care of their kids.
I'm totally incoherent with the emotions of this fill right now, so I'll just shut up and leave it with: PLESE CONTINUE!
Recaptca say: Senator sunbeam Yes, Tomasz certainly is!
Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 1 (3/3)
anonymous
June 15 2010, 16:19:31 UTC
Op!Anon confesses her undying love for author!anon ^__^ Its sooo perfect! I really like Tomasz, hes soo cute... Author!Anon, thank you, thank you, thank you very very much!
Sweet Child Of mine- 2 (2/6)
anonymous
June 20 2010, 08:56:56 UTC
He was first to arrive out of the three. He looked at the note says "there is only two things unlimited- the universe and the human stupidity. And I'm not sure about the first- Albert Einstein", Shook his head and set by his desk. His silk flowers in a cup set there, still nice and comforting as ever, and turned his computer on. According to what Jecek told him yesterday, he should receive a list of his duties for today as he will log into the inner interaction system. Anything else will be told to him directly
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Sweet Child Of mine- 2 (3/6)
anonymous
June 20 2010, 08:58:26 UTC
"Your lovely omen from before just came true, Alicja." Marek turned his head to the bouncy, massy woman, "I got my morning dos of despair by your absolute lack of manners. Honestly, you are hopeless. Now, if you'll excuse me, I have work to do…and I should at least try to make sure Jecek will not avoid all his important meetings
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Sweet Child Of mine- 2 (4/6)
anonymous
June 20 2010, 08:59:19 UTC
"Alicja, It's your job to handle this… when we'll be able to drink decent coffee again?" asked one of the girls, "not to speak about what a nightmare it is go get senator Pompous his coffee that way
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Sweet Child Of mine- 2 (5/6)
anonymous
June 20 2010, 09:00:58 UTC
"Much bigger! He just barged into the prim minister's office out of nowhere- while he was in an impotent meeting with the minister of economics- and pretty much kicked the minister out! You should have seen this!" all this the guy said without breathing in the middle. Tomasz and others stood there, various expressions of amusement and wonder on their faces. The guy at the door beamed. "And that's not it! He was screaming about something- he was so loud about whatever it was you could hear it from two floors below! Thought, I asked and no one know what it was about… and after that he got out with this look, you know
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Sweet Child Of mine- 2 (6/6)
anonymous
June 20 2010, 09:03:21 UTC
"Yah, I guess…" Muttered Tomasz. He was a practical person. Most of the rumors must have been exaggerations created by bored people with need to some interest. It was fine, really, but a person who doesn't grow old? Ridicules. Ho, well. Whatever pulled their carriage. He set down on his chair and took a look at his task list.
Alicja looked unpleased by his reaction. "Just wait for a while Firley. There are more to tell-" Ring! Alicja cursed and picked up the phone. Tomasz sighed and went back to work. Really. He had more important stuff to do them listen to some impossible rumors about some…person from the top floor.
He could have never guessed that in a few months, when the elections campaigns will begin, the rumors will come back to bit him from behind.
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Ok, that's it for this sunday! more next week. ^___^ and I'll do my best to find a beta untill then. Wish me luck...
(Anon still feel like she FAIL becouse of he english:-P)
Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 2 (6/6)
anonymous
June 21 2010, 17:13:01 UTC
Omigawd, omigawd, omigawd. Tomasz has totally stolen my heart. <3 He's so utterly sweet.
And, GAWD, Feliks. XD I'm going to predict he's pissed off because he found out Tomasz is working there? Or that Tomasz spends his days color-coding files. Ew. Most suckish job ever.
I love it to death, and if you want, I'll beta for you. ^_^ I'll de-anon for you if you're interested.
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This sounds so much like child thinking, it made me go d'awww.
I like this Tomasz guy, idealists are sweet. You're good with characterization, and I like the image of the chaotic office building and the setting in general. There are some minor mistakes, but I understand what you write with no problem - I'd offer to beta myself, but I'm not a native speaker (and I'm neck deep in schoolwork anyway - I shouldn't even be here ;_;)
But please, don't be discouraged!
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Anon, I'm in love with your fill!
Really, it's very sweet and lovely <3 And since LietPol is my OTP this is one of the best and lovely things I've ever read! Keep writing it, Tomasz is such a sweet guy <3 I can't wait for him to meet one of his parents. I'll also wonder who he will find first, since both of them have green eyes xD
Anyway, I'll be looking for this! Go, Anon, go!
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I'm totally incoherent with the emotions of this fill right now, so I'll just shut up and leave it with: PLESE CONTINUE!
Recaptca say: Senator sunbeam
Yes, Tomasz certainly is!
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Its sooo perfect! I really like Tomasz, hes soo cute...
Author!Anon, thank you, thank you, thank you very very much!
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Alicja looked unpleased by his reaction.
"Just wait for a while Firley. There are more to tell-"
Ring!
Alicja cursed and picked up the phone. Tomasz sighed and went back to work. Really. He had more important stuff to do them listen to some impossible rumors about some…person from the top floor.
He could have never guessed that in a few months, when the elections campaigns will begin, the rumors will come back to bit him from behind.
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Ok, that's it for this sunday! more next week. ^___^ and I'll do my best to find a beta untill then. Wish me luck...
(Anon still feel like she FAIL becouse of he english:-P)
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And, GAWD, Feliks. XD I'm going to predict he's pissed off because he found out Tomasz is working there? Or that Tomasz spends his days color-coding files. Ew. Most suckish job ever.
I love it to death, and if you want, I'll beta for you. ^_^ I'll de-anon for you if you're interested.
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