You Take Me In (10/?)
anonymous
October 12 2010, 01:15:36 UTC
“You will wait if you know what's good for you,” England responded slowly, the urge to take him here and now in the back seat of the limo almost too tempting to ignore. His gave his desire something better to hold on to... The image of America in the not so distant future; America dressed in those fitted breeches and loose shirts, knelt and obedient and oh so ready to have his Empire take him as he would
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You Take Me In (11/?)
anonymous
October 12 2010, 01:16:48 UTC
America froze beside him as England redirected his eyes back to the man. “Men like Jefferson, Adams, Franklin... They were the equivalent of criminals to my nation because they threatened to change an entire way of life. Their ideas were unheard of, their plans for you troubled me and every other empire in Europe because there were people in our countries who would latch onto them and use them in their own quests to fight the system
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You Take Me In (12/?)
anonymous
October 12 2010, 01:18:57 UTC
America gawked at him, looking as though he was debating on laughing or just starring stupidly down at England. Either way, it irritated the older man that his own issues were always a joke to America. That just hurt him even more. “England... He doesn't have me. And France and I are old news. I haven't... we haven't in a long time.”
“I don't care so much about now,” England lied. If America was with France now, it would hurt. That didn't stop the past from continuing to hurt him into the present. “He took from you what no one in the world can have now, not even if you wanted to give them-” He paused and huffed at how pathetic he sounded. “He had you first.”
America's mouth fell into an “O” shape, eyes widening in surprise. He fiddled about in his seat and and tried to speak in a more appeasing tone, as though seeing finally how horrible England was feeling even discussing this. “I'm sorry.”
“Don't be,” England dismissed with another wave. “Just don't bring it up when we- If we do this.” He chanced another look back at
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Re: You Take Me In (12/?)
anonymous
October 12 2010, 02:09:01 UTC
So. This is amazing.
Let me just say that I simply adore how they're going about this; the talking it over, England being so serious and downright wonderfully considerate, whatever you want to call it, America still wanting this despite all--what a great fill. ♥
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anonymous
October 12 2010, 04:18:04 UTC
Anooooonnnnnn /squee/
Oh how I love the conversation, these two, the ending of the chapter /sends love/
Anyway, I'm sorry, but I have to point out that maybe you can have a beta look at your updates? Some of the mistakes are very glaring and can interfere with the reading and flow of the story, and uh... I feel horrible since I understand that nobody is perfect /fidgets/ BUT I still love this fill, just so you know! It's very interesting how you write both Alfred and Arthur /major love/
Thank you for writing this, and also for the fast updates <3<3 I'll be waiting here for future parts <3
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anonymous
October 12 2010, 04:30:47 UTC
Ah, yes... I don't have a beta, but I do in fact need to find one. My spelling is especially atrocious and that's in part because of a learning disability. Often i find them after the fact and it's quite frustrating because it does interfere with the overall pace of the story.
So I'm sorry to you and everyone else for that... I'll work on finding someone, though I'm not entirely sure where to look.
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anonymous
October 12 2010, 04:48:06 UTC
Oh authornon, I'm sorry I didn't know that...
I wish I can help you with it, but I only have the capabilities to spot basic typo mistakes, as I'm not a native English speaker and I'm so out of practice. However, if you need a more proper beta reader, there is a thread for that here http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/15405.html
I wish that once the story is all finished, you can post the beta-ed/edited version somewhere so I can properly shower you with love and roses <3
Re: You Take Me In (12/?)
anonymous
October 12 2010, 04:39:31 UTC
Another awesomely fufilling update. While I'm dying for the sexy bits, the amount of detail you go into them discussing past issues is crucial in making this fic as well written as it is.
Re: You Take Me In (12/?)
anonymous
October 12 2010, 06:18:31 UTC
I love how the title makes you think it's another USUK PWP (you know the kind).
Then you open it (due in part to some masochism/wishful thinking), and it's actually a worthy and exceptionally well written read. My hat is tipped to you, Author Anon, for making me feel less disgruntled about this pairing.
I am simply amazed at the emotion you manage to convey in this story. England is being so good, so generous and emotionally intelligent about this (quite the novelty for himXD), that he makes me warm inside, even when he hurt America on purpose to make him see. His frequent almost-slips of control are incredibly hot too; those times when America is pushing all the right buttons, sometimes on purpose, and even sexier, sometimes without realising it, I love them hard <3
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Re: You Take Me In (12/?)
anonymous
October 13 2010, 05:09:16 UTC
J-just poking in to say that this chapter was awesome and I LOVE you for making the connection between anti-democracy and anti-communism. Okay, I'm biased, being a huge leftist, but I still think it's a great metaphor and definitely something America should think about and think about hard because he's definitely guilty of putting into other nations's business (sometimes with terrible, terrible consequences).
Okay, sorry for the political stuff there. orz I know, shouldn't bring stuff like that up in a kink meme. Anyway, this fill is veryvery hot and I ended up favouriting it even though I'm not really a huge fan of the pairing...
Oh and btw, the horrible person I am, I loved how precisely England knew where to hit to make it really hurt bad. It just showed perfectly how bad it could get if they didn't talk about it first. (And poor England, must be hard when America doesn't quite understand how much some things hurt you...)
You Take Me In (13/?)
anonymous
October 15 2010, 18:19:18 UTC
It was raining again in London. Looking down from the third story of his flat, England beheld a sea of umbrellas muddling together in the street below. They passed another so closely, it was nearly impossible to catch sight of the people beneath them. The roads had a steady flow of traffic, busses and cars filing by with the changing of the lights, windshield wipers moving at a continuous pace that was neither too fast nor too slow. All in all, a typical view for a nation so used to the rain
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You Take Me In (14/?)
anonymous
October 15 2010, 18:20:33 UTC
England shut his eyes and sat down heavily in one of the kitchen chairs, tea in one hand while the other massaged his temples. Relax. That what he needed to do. Sip his tea and wait out the rain until all thoughts of America dissipated like the steam rising from his cup.
The the pocket of his trousers began to vibrate.
Groaning in vexation, England snatched the cellular out of his pocket and glared at the flashing screen. His scowl was gone the minute he saw America's name blinking. He cursed, spilling the tea over his tablecloth and he glanced at the text.
sorry for springing this up last minute but if u wanna come visit i'm game.
England felt his breath hitch as he stared down at the message. All thought of scolding the younger man for his atrocious grammar lost as his fingers worked on their own to swiftly reply.
What time?
He waited a few moments, eyes never blinking or roaming away from the phone until it vibrated again.
tonight. i'm at the house.England had known immediately what house he was referring to. The old
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Re: You Take Me In (14/?)
anonymous
October 15 2010, 20:39:30 UTC
Yaaay, update!! Can I just say--I absolutely love this fill. It's sexy from the get-go, even without explicit sex...and I love how you have them exploring each other's weaknesses--especially painful triggers to suppressed memories. It's such a loving, adventurous atmosphere--loving every chapter of this :)
Calling him “father” or “big brother” is encouraged too ^^
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“I don't care so much about now,” England lied. If America was with France now, it would hurt. That didn't stop the past from continuing to hurt him into the present. “He took from you what no one in the world can have now, not even if you wanted to give them-” He paused and huffed at how pathetic he sounded. “He had you first.”
America's mouth fell into an “O” shape, eyes widening in surprise. He fiddled about in his seat and and tried to speak in a more appeasing tone, as though seeing finally how horrible England was feeling even discussing this. “I'm sorry.”
“Don't be,” England dismissed with another wave. “Just don't bring it up when we- If we do this.” He chanced another look back at ( ... )
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This is incredibly erotic even if they are not doing anything yet. You are amazing.
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Let me just say that I simply adore how they're going about this; the talking it over, England being so serious and downright wonderfully considerate, whatever you want to call it, America still wanting this despite all--what a great fill. ♥
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Oh how I love the conversation, these two, the ending of the chapter /sends love/
Anyway, I'm sorry, but I have to point out that maybe you can have a beta look at your updates? Some of the mistakes are very glaring and can interfere with the reading and flow of the story, and uh... I feel horrible since I understand that nobody is perfect /fidgets/ BUT I still love this fill, just so you know! It's very interesting how you write both Alfred and Arthur /major love/
Thank you for writing this, and also for the fast updates <3<3 I'll be waiting here for future parts <3
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So I'm sorry to you and everyone else for that... I'll work on finding someone, though I'm not entirely sure where to look.
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I wish I can help you with it, but I only have the capabilities to spot basic typo mistakes, as I'm not a native English speaker and I'm so out of practice. However, if you need a more proper beta reader, there is a thread for that here http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/15405.html
I wish that once the story is all finished, you can post the beta-ed/edited version somewhere so I can properly shower you with love and roses <3
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Can't wait for moar... -camps out-
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Then you open it (due in part to some masochism/wishful thinking), and it's actually a worthy and exceptionally well written read. My hat is tipped to you, Author Anon, for making me feel less disgruntled about this pairing.
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Okay, sorry for the political stuff there. orz I know, shouldn't bring stuff like that up in a kink meme. Anyway, this fill is veryvery hot and I ended up favouriting it even though I'm not really a huge fan of the pairing...
Oh and btw, the horrible person I am, I loved how precisely England knew where to hit to make it really hurt bad. It just showed perfectly how bad it could get if they didn't talk about it first. (And poor England, must be hard when America doesn't quite understand how much some things hurt you...)
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The the pocket of his trousers began to vibrate.
Groaning in vexation, England snatched the cellular out of his pocket and glared at the flashing screen. His scowl was gone the minute he saw America's name blinking. He cursed, spilling the tea over his tablecloth and he glanced at the text.
sorry for springing this up last minute but if u wanna come visit i'm game.
England felt his breath hitch as he stared down at the message. All thought of scolding the younger man for his atrocious grammar lost as his fingers worked on their own to swiftly reply.
What time?
He waited a few moments, eyes never blinking or roaming away from the phone until it vibrated again.
tonight. i'm at the house.England had known immediately what house he was referring to. The old ( ... )
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Can I just say--I absolutely love this fill.
It's sexy from the get-go, even without explicit sex...and I love how you have them exploring each other's weaknesses--especially painful triggers to suppressed memories. It's such a loving, adventurous atmosphere--loving every chapter of this :)
Can't wait for more~
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