Anything Goes Sequel: Sequel to Cherry Pie (Good Het Smut fill with America/fem!Canada)
Hi everyone, well here it is, the sequel to the ridiculously filthy Cherry Pie. I had visions of making this perhaps a tad less graphic and a little more cerebral but who am I kidding, this is totally my guilty pleasure.
This will ultimately feature Canada/fem!America but first we'll go through a smattering of plot followed by several nations/Canada. I didn't want to list them because I don't want to lock myself into anything in case I change my mind. Have to teach America a lesson, don't we? Also anyone who read the last story knows that my kinks are a mile long so be prepared for anything except scat and non con. Anyhoo, enjoy!“...almost ran that jerk over- he deserved it too- and that’s when I called you from the airport.” Canada sighed, wriggling the slipper off his
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 9/?
anonymous
October 15 2010, 04:47:47 UTC
America had stopped laughing when he took in the half defeated expression on Canada’s face. Prussia too quieted himself with a few carefully whispered words from Austria. See, Mattie, this is exactly what I’m talking about. This is why you need me you take care of you. I mean really? Did you really think you were gonna come in like be all hot and sexy and I’d go “oh hey Mattie, I was totally wrong I can’t believe I ever thought you made a better girl. See this is the kind of shit that happens to you all the time. “Aww, c’mon bro, cheer up,” America offered sympathetically. “It’s not the worst thing that’s ever happened to you.” “You have Alfred for a brother to start,” Russia offered ignoring America’s glare. “Shuttup Ivan. All of you oughta be ashamed of yourselves for talking poor Mattie into this.”
Poor Mattie? Canada looked at America with a narrowed gaze as he continued to talk. “I mean jeez, look at him, he’s a total mess ‘cause of you jerks.” I think I can survive a little fucking embarrassment, Mr. Hero... America clanked
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 10/?
anonymous
October 15 2010, 04:49:36 UTC
Is he wearing chapstick? England’s lips were soft and warm pressed against his and he found it was far easier than he would’ve thought to forget about America and the rest of the nations now sitting down watching them. The kiss was a soft butterfly touch and England’s tongue soon swiped at his lips with a gentle tease. The wet tongue painted over his lips, urging them apart, and Canada complied somewhat breathless. He hadn’t realized that he’d even been maneuvered backwards until he felt the back of his thighs hit the long conference table. Canada shifted more comfortably, half seated on it, bringing himself down to England’s height. He felt those nimble fingers threading through his hair, twining around the fine blonde strands slowly tugging harder and harder in a delirious counterpoint to the languid motion of England’s tongue twining wet circles around his own
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 10/?
anonymous
October 15 2010, 07:44:05 UTC
Oh lord, Alfred's "funstopper gland," Austria reading a novel while England's dominating Canada, England being taller than Canada... ♥ And even though I lol'd at Sealand, I cringed. Poor Canada, getting dub-conned by a 60 year-old. D:
Last update you said you didn't mind concrit, so I've some whited out: I do really enjoy this fic, so much, but sometimes the way the paragraphs are written is a little hard to read. A new paragraph should begin with each new speaker (and thinker), since that a) makes it clearer who's speaking, and b) makes the story less of a wall-of-text. I can give you some examples, if you'd like?
There are also a few minor grammar errors ("to" vs "too"), which a grammar checker in a word processor should be able to fix.
But seriously, I love this fic. There was an anon back on Cherry Pie who said it better than I am, but you're turning out some beautifully filthy work here. So much of the porn fic I've read is, idk, sanitised - come neatly disappears into throats or washcloths without being skicky/gooey/smearing
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 10/? author!anon
anonymous
October 15 2010, 13:40:10 UTC
Hi, and thanks for the feedback! I love writing dirty sex. It's fun.
I tend to forget things are easier to follow for me when I'm reading over since I know exactly what's going on. I think I might need to brush up on some of my basic grammar too (typos aside). The proper way to format speech/thoughts still gets me; I think I've read about 3 totally contradictory ways about how to do it *falls over*
If you could give an example or two that'd be great! It'd help me know what's what :)
Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 10/?
anonymous
October 16 2010, 07:14:05 UTC
New anon here. I just finished reading Cherry Pie. And Omg this is so fkn hot. I love how dirty you make everything. The kinkier the better.
Your characterization of everyone is so refreshingly different too. For example, America not always being such a well-intending puppy. I mean c'mon he's a dick. And I like that France isn't there. I know most people would have put him in, but it's just not very him. So yeah, you just got yourself a new loyal stalker follower.
And I'm extremely excited to see Al suffer. You go, Matt! Make him eat his words.
Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 10/?
anonymous
October 17 2010, 15:19:46 UTC
Gosh, I am loving this. And what made me squeel with joy is the fact that Austria is (or presumed to be) in a relationship with the two Gerbros. Oh how hot is that?? Everyone's reaction to Sealand jumping onto Canada was bloody hilarious. Love this!!
Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 11/?
anonymous
October 27 2010, 04:34:39 UTC
Thanks to everyone reading and commenting, it’s always appreciated :) Once again as this is getting way more kinky I’ll direct everyone to the initial warning at the beginning. Enjoy!Breathless, Canada blinked, licking the lingering bitter minty taste from his lips, rolling his tongue around his own palette to savor the last essence of England when the other pulled back. England released his hold, the back of his hand drawing down Canada’s face. His voice was firm and controlled as he stepped back
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 12/?
anonymous
October 27 2010, 04:35:51 UTC
Canada was still wearing a faded black T shirt underneath that clung like a fucking second skin, and America realized then just how low those jeans were hanging on those slender hips. He didn’t immediately remove the shirt, instead looking up and seeking approval from England. The older nation was still seated with an utterly dismissive air about him as he easily filled the antique Victorian pipe with vanilla tobacco. Canada was almost hypnotized by those long slender fingers pinching and stuffing the first bit careful to pack it in only a little and then tighter with the second. England turned the pipe carefully, packing the tobacco evenly and methodically, the precious antique rotating, his forefinger circling inside and christ how did England make that look so damn sexual? Canada tugged the shirt up as England added the third pinch, wringing the hem as if he were unsure before drawing it up between his teeth shyly revealing the smooth skin and hard muscles of his stomach
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 13/?
anonymous
October 27 2010, 04:37:26 UTC
England breathed in deeply, the familiar warmth in his lungs caressing him from the inside like an old friend, and he took the time to savor it, blowing a long stream of smoke out blissfully. He’d set the lighter down, right hand still holding onto the pipe stem as he smoked. In his left hand he caressed the old snuff box like a lover, his thumb running along the smooth curves and ample breasts of the woman carved into it ages ago with a delicate artist’s touch. The curl of smoke seemed to undulate in the still air lingering like the mist of a dream and England watched from where he sat as Canada’s hands moved and once again remained in stasis at the button of his jeans as he let the smoke wrap around him
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 14a/?
anonymous
October 27 2010, 04:39:15 UTC
England looked him up and down keeping his features impassive, hiding his amusement at Canada’s obsession with the old pipe. You’d rather I bugger you with this, I swear... He took another long drag of the pipe, eyes half shut enjoy the warmth and the full flavor of the tobacco and then gestured for Canada to turn around with a twist of his index finger
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 14b/?
anonymous
October 27 2010, 04:45:43 UTC
Canada was glad that France wasn’t here; his other father figure would never understand the nature of their relationship. He knew exactly what England was going to do and as he breathed in the warm smoke and felt the burn in his lungs and felt more than heard England susserate out “Now show daddy how you touch yourself when I’m not here,” he was back in that old study again still a virgin standing naked before the older nation for inspection. And then in his memories he was kneeling down on the floor touching himself, watching as England stroked his cock through his trousers, whimpering as England berated and denigrated and finally brought him off with his fucking foot. He'd forbidden him from ever touching another nation back then even as Canada had his cock shoved halfway down his willing throat
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Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 14b/?
anonymous
October 27 2010, 06:50:20 UTC
I just found this sequel, and seriously? The only thing that could make England daddy!kink with Canada hotter would be to combine it with my other kinks. Like, you know, smoking, exhibitionism, and anything D/s. Jesus, anon. Too hot. *_* Seriously, I wish to god I saw more kinky England/Canada like this; hell, or any kinky England/Canada at all. All is see is fluff, or angst and drama, with almost no smut, let alone kinky goodness. T_T
... Totally squicked by Sealand, though. OTL Although on second thought, I'm actually more squicked by some of Alfred's thoughts towards Matthew; sometimes people's internal monologue reveals more than you want to know, yeah?
Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 14b/? author!anon
anonymous
October 28 2010, 04:48:22 UTC
Haha, yeah I know exactly what you mean about the inner thoughts thing. I just want to make sure I'm presenting all sides as best as I can though I think I do need to work a bit at fleshing America out more when I de anon to be more rounded.
I also love England/Canada and couldn't get the thing with the pipe out of my head once I thought of it. Also going to be doing a bit more kinky stuff where these two are concerned so stay tuned!
Re: Multiple/Canada & Canada/Fem!America If U Seek Alfred 14b/? author!anon
anonymous
October 28 2010, 06:33:37 UTC
Heh, I'm glad the inner thoughts thing was on purpose; it actually makes Alfred more realistic and gives him room to grow and grow up as a character in the story, even the reader presumably doesn't like him very much at the moment! Well done, seriously; and although I guess he does need a little fleshing out, he'll (presumably?) grow a bit as a character and give us some insight into what he's thinking. A quick little flashback to his (sexual) relationship with Matthew as a man might help there, I think? Though I'm not sure where to fit it in, honestly.
And maybe he'll even learn to understand his brother better, even though he'll probably always say dumbass things that piss Matthew off! ... *gleefully smacks her nation upside his head XD
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Anything Goes Sequel: Sequel to Cherry Pie (Good Het Smut fill with America/fem!Canada)
Hi everyone, well here it is, the sequel to the ridiculously filthy Cherry Pie. I had visions of making this perhaps a tad less graphic and a little more cerebral but who am I kidding, this is totally my guilty pleasure.
This will ultimately feature Canada/fem!America but first we'll go through a smattering of plot followed by several nations/Canada. I didn't want to list them because I don't want to lock myself into anything in case I change my mind. Have to teach America a lesson, don't we? Also anyone who read the last story knows that my kinks are a mile long so be prepared for anything except scat and non con. Anyhoo, enjoy!“...almost ran that jerk over- he deserved it too- and that’s when I called you from the airport.” Canada sighed, wriggling the slipper off his ( ... )
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“Aww, c’mon bro, cheer up,” America offered sympathetically. “It’s not the worst thing that’s ever happened to you.”
“You have Alfred for a brother to start,” Russia offered ignoring America’s glare.
“Shuttup Ivan. All of you oughta be ashamed of yourselves for talking poor Mattie into this.”
Poor Mattie? Canada looked at America with a narrowed gaze as he continued to talk.
“I mean jeez, look at him, he’s a total mess ‘cause of you jerks.” I think I can survive a little fucking embarrassment, Mr. Hero... America clanked ( ... )
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Last update you said you didn't mind concrit, so I've some whited out: I do really enjoy this fic, so much, but sometimes the way the paragraphs are written is a little hard to read. A new paragraph should begin with each new speaker (and thinker), since that a) makes it clearer who's speaking, and b) makes the story less of a wall-of-text. I can give you some examples, if you'd like?
There are also a few minor grammar errors ("to" vs "too"), which a grammar checker in a word processor should be able to fix.
But seriously, I love this fic. There was an anon back on Cherry Pie who said it better than I am, but you're turning out some beautifully filthy work here. So much of the porn fic I've read is, idk, sanitised - come neatly disappears into throats or washcloths without being skicky/gooey/smearing ( ... )
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I tend to forget things are easier to follow for me when I'm reading over since I know exactly what's going on. I think I might need to brush up on some of my basic grammar too (typos aside). The proper way to format speech/thoughts still gets me; I think I've read about 3 totally contradictory ways about how to do it *falls over*
If you could give an example or two that'd be great! It'd help me know what's what :)
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Your characterization of everyone is so refreshingly different too. For example, America not always being such a well-intending puppy. I mean c'mon he's a dick. And I like that France isn't there. I know most people would have put him in, but it's just not very him. So yeah, you just got yourself a new loyal stalker follower.
And I'm extremely excited to see Al suffer. You go, Matt! Make him eat his words.
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... Totally squicked by Sealand, though. OTL Although on second thought, I'm actually more squicked by some of Alfred's thoughts towards Matthew; sometimes people's internal monologue reveals more than you want to know, yeah?
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I also love England/Canada and couldn't get the thing with the pipe out of my head once I thought of it. Also going to be doing a bit more kinky stuff where these two are concerned so stay tuned!
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And maybe he'll even learn to understand his brother better, even though he'll probably always say dumbass things that piss Matthew off! ... *gleefully smacks her nation upside his head XD ( ... )
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