Concrit Post 5

[hmd_meme]

How's My Driving?

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[patchouli]

@ discedo:
Umi Ryuuzaki | Magic Knight Rayearth | embracethewaves
Edward Elric | Fullmetal Alchemist | priceoftruth
clone!Syaoran | Tsubasa Reservoir Chronicle | featherseeking
Sora | Kingdom Hearts | gummiblocks

@ polychromatic:
Fuu Hououji | Magic Knight Rayearth | gustymagic

oh please help, i feel like i'm doing so poorly lately ;___; (i'm working on activity though, if that's helping? but i feel like i'm messing up with all my characters when i DO post, so any suggestions you have, either for voicing or for like...motivations/goals/things they should be focused on but aren't...i'd really appreciate it orz)

dshkjdf and FUU IS BRAND NEW SO ANYTHING YOU WANT TO SAY HELPS BEFORE I GET INTO BAD HABITS. ♥

[patchouli]

I haven't seen too much of your Fuu yet to make a really detailed judgment, but she seems pretty good so far. I wouldn't expect much less of you because you have a great grasp on Umi and the canon itself.

All of your characters are spot on in their characterizations. But the activity is what gets me. I don't see you tagging around with anyone all that much, and when you do, it seems like you drop a lot of tags. It seems to be more frequent with Syaoran, I've noticed there are times he doesn't even tag his canonmates when there's good opportunity to, or the conversation just seems to fizzle out after a couple of tags. Sora seems to tag mostly canonmates and not much else so far, which in a sense, would be OOC for someone who frequently talks to a lot of people in his travels. Sadly, I forget that you even play Ed. I see him tag Alphonse, Winry (when she's around), and Maka. Ed may be more reserved unless provoked, but he's not completely anti-social. I think of all your characters, Umi is the most active, but it feels like even she

[patchouli]

yeah, activity's been something i have been trying to work with for a while -- at this point, i think i should say i've really been wrestling with it. i've been trying to get better (especially tagging non-canonmates) but it's something thats gonna need more work to really improve on. mannn i wish i knew why i was having this problem, it sucks so bad x_X

thanks, though. i'm continuing to work on it. ♥

[chibi_scriber]

You don't know how happy I was when I saw you are ingen. <3 I can only imagine that you've improved over the years, and you were always a great roleplayer so I bet you are still wonderful. ♥

[sugarvoice]

memento_eden
handsforhealing - Winry Rockbell / FMA
protectoroflove - Kinomoto Sakura / CCS
prayfortomorrow - Furude Rika / Higurashi
taiyakidreamer - Tsukimiya Ayu / Kanon

valkyrieexpress
hon_ya - Miyazaki Nodoka / Negima!

[el_hustino]

The only character I'm familiar with is Rika--and not even THAT familiar since I haven't finished the series--and I think you're doing really well with her, especially with showing her 'real' side to certain characters.

The only advice I have is that you might be overdoing her speech mannerisms a little bit, so just watch that. It's not huge, but I figured I'd mention it.

Again, you're doing very well with her otherwise and I really enjoy playing with your other characters even when I don't know their canons.

[samekh]

Even though both my communities both just had one, s-sob. But I love crit.

@ discedo
Fay D. Flourite | Tsubasa: RC | big_kitty
Roronoa Zoro | One Piece | threesword

@ Kiseki RPG
Kurogane | Tsubasa: RC | anewfight
Mokona Modoki | Tsubasa: RC | whiteporkbun
Touya | Tsubasa: RC | toppedbysister

[hotandcoldrp]

@mayfield_rpg
Guy Gardner from DC Comics- one_punched
PFC Dick Simmons from Red vs. Blue- sycophanticdick

@memento_eden
Tsubaki Nakatsukasa from Soul Eater- a_scented_blade
Booster Gold/Michael Jon Carter from DC Comics- future_is_gold
Sgt. Dexter Grif from Red vs. Blue- semper_fi_bitch
Eventually Miles Edgeworth from Phoenix Wright- halberdvshield dear_mun'd here.

@netherworld_rpg
Redcloak from The Order of the Stick- crimsonmantled
Agent Washington from Red vs. Blue- memoryisthekey

I would really appreciate input particularly in regards to Grif's recent more serious direction and on Edgeworth in general before I app him.

[el_hustino]

BE MORE ACTIVE WITH EDGEWORTH, IT'S LIKE HE'S NOT EVEN TH-Oh, right.

Really, though, I can't think of any actual criticism beyond being a LITTLE more active with Tsubaki and Booster, but that could just be me overlooking them by mistake. You've managed to take Grif--who is from a series that is frankly not accustomed to, you know, SERIOUS THINGS--and managed to put him through some SERIOUS THINGS that feel realistic and well-done.

BE MORE ACTIVE IN NETHERWORLD though I really should find a way to stir up activity myself, so it's a good part my responsibility...

[alba_aulbath]

I have no idea who you are, but holy crap someone plays Guy Gardner. WITH THAT NAME.

That's just gold. No pun intended, since you also play Booster.

[hotandcoldrp]

I know, right? When I checked it for availability, I was absolutely flabbergasted that it wasn't taken.

[aristomnom]

They should all have hmd's on their own journals, but if you prefer this space:

runhidefight
aristomnom
lara_was_here

From microcosm_rp

[for_marian]

(Shido-mun here in an elsegame journal. I'm in the middle of writing tags. ^^;; )

I don't know Howard's canon all that well, and honestly haven't been following Lara, so I really can only talk about Cain. But I think you know pretty much everything I could say!

Summary, basically, is that yes, it can be a little awkward at times to have a mun who is uncomfortable with playing certain things that it's IC for a character to do, but we've been able to work around that well enough for it to be only a very minor issue, IMO. I think in general you strike a good balance with a character whose canon doesn't give a whole lot to go on, and what is there is often contradictory or nonsensical.

In general, I enjoy playing with you a lot. Keep up the good work. ^^

[_brokeneternity]

Oh my god. You guys RP Nightwalker?

I....

Holy shit.

[dawn_rune]

(still Shido-mun)

eheheh. It's all Cain-mun's fault. I saw a Cain and was like... kjcbajshvbahvaj NIGHTWALKER. So I apped Shido. *scratches nose* You know, it's a shockingly difficult canon to RP sometimes, considering all its plot holes, logic failures and continuity issues. *laugh*