epitaph help!

[hopelessxlove]

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i need your help!!

i have to do epitaphs for my english class (the things that go on gravestones.....). They are just fictitous, but I don't know if this one is good. I feel like it's missing something. so please please please help me make it better!!

Comments

[emovixn]

heather, i think it's PERFECT how it is.

[hopelessxlove]

ok thanks

Re: Heres some help

[svanars]

So this is one i did last year for Mrs. Rook's. Of course she loved it because it was about a teacher...:) i don't know if it will help but i thought i would try.

"The Teacher"
Every morning when I woke up
I was excited to teach
Every student that walked in the room
Was influenced by me
The power I had in these two hands
To mold new minds to do good in the world
Was a power that kept me teaching for 35 years
Although my bones and muscles ached
My heart still lived for the children
Though my wrinkles showed and hair was grey
I continued to work everyday
I was able to plant the seeds of knowledge
Tend to them and water them with love
Care for them and watch them grow.
Now as I lay here they celebrate me and honor me.
They are planting seeds in honor of my name
They are doing for me what I did for them.
I have taught them well.

Re: Heres some help

[hopelessxlove]

thanks!

[xjennaboox]

hey heather its jenna, i am adding you to my friends list! --xo