Come On In

[hottielibrarian]

Erica was changing back into her street clothes in the locker room after another soul-crushing, alienating day.  She was beyond tired, near-catatonic in her drowsiness.  Her body just wanted to fall into a bed, preferably with a Callie in it.  Her frustration with everyone around her wearied her until she couldn't even be angry anymore.

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[greys_1]

the scene you created in the on call room was set out with just the right amount of sexual tension and conflict their 'ok' relationship had been put in.

Something was amiss in the universe when Callie wasn't allowed to rip Erica's clothes off." this was funny, but the deeper meaning lies is Callie realising they had to figure this out - amotionally before they could reclaim their physical relationship.

"The sob languished in her throat, misting Erica's eyes, a warning sign of the sea of tears waiting to fall."

"The voice that normally peeled Callie's clothes off her body, now chipped away at Callie's heart." so true, i'm surprised Callie lasted three days without talking to Erica.

thanks for the mushy ending, a grovelling Callie would be rather irreristable.

[hottielibrarian]

Cool--I'm glad the sexual tension came across in the locker room scene and the fact that they were not okay.

Right! They had a lot of emotional damage to fix before they could get back to the physical part of their relationship.

Yeah, I guess three days is a long time, but I guess I wanted Callie to suffer for what she did. I wanted her to try to honor Erica's wishes, but ultimately not be able to live without Erica.

I know, who could deny a grovelling Callie? And I'm all about the mushy stuff. Thanks so much for reading and giving such detailed feedback--I so love to hear specifically what worked. Thanks!!

SHHHH

[greys_1]

I could have chosen many more parts that stood out to me. You are turning my view on librarians around..although you have to admit a LOT of them do just glare and shout (ironically) for everyone to be quiet.

i'm lovig your relationship with words and over the moon that you bring callie and erica to life with them so regularly.

i'm in a lovy dovey mood - hugs*

Re: SHHHH

[hottielibrarian]

No, I'm not one of those evil librarians. I'm the good kind of librarian. :)
Well, I'm over the moon that people still read and/or care about Callie and Erica as much as I do!

[kayesoob]

Loved it.
Could actually picture this instead of what actually happened.
great writing

[hottielibrarian]

Wow-great!! I wish this had happened on the show. Thanks for reading!!

[magapple]

Oh God. You almost made me cry! I kinda hate you for that. Heh.

You know, this was... so, so, *so* good. I mean, you made it! The way you avoided the Parking Lot of No Return thing made a big difference. I absolutely *love* your poetic way of narrating the story, you wide vocabulary (it really makes all the difference) and your good punctuation. It makes a good fic become a great one (;

I don't think Callie's realization of how much she needed and loved Erica could've been any better, and she, Callie, *finally* choosing Erica -over everything, Erica (and this time for real)-, was the most perfect thing ever (: Seriously, this was plain awesome.

Excellent job! Thank you for writing this (:

[hottielibrarian]

Oh, I'm sorry to almost make you cry! I almost cried writing it.

You're right--I wanted to pretend that whole Erica being banished to the parking lot never happened. Her leaving like that never made any sense to me and felt more like an insulting slap in the face.

I think Callie had to lose Erica, at least temporarily, to realize how much she needed her and that she had to choose Erica over everyone. I'm so happy to hear that came across.

Thank you for reading and leaving such thorough, kind feedback--it means so much to me to hear what you think stuck out to you.

Thanks again!

[hahnsrockstar]

That's how to make the evil go away.

[hottielibrarian]

Totally! Had to rewrite that bullshit ending they were given. Thanks for reading!!!

[asc11]

aww i loved that! callie should have done that! great job! i love your writing!

[hottielibrarian]

Thanks! I wish Callie had done that on the show. Thanks so much for reading!