Come On In

[hottielibrarian]

Erica was changing back into her street clothes in the locker room after another soul-crushing, alienating day.  She was beyond tired, near-catatonic in her drowsiness.  Her body just wanted to fall into a bed, preferably with a Callie in it.  Her frustration with everyone around her wearied her until she couldn't even be angry anymore.

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[hottielibrarian]

Cool, I'm a sucker for rambling-Callie. Yeah, Callie should have begged for forgiveness, she really screwed up. I totally think Erica was the more emotional and sensitive one. I think it's an interesting contrast to her confident, badass persona at work. I know--I was so waiting for Callie to admit her love for Erica on the show. I wanted her to say it first. Oh my God, I would never let Erica just leave. I don't buy that she would ever leave Callie. Of course she was going to be home that night. Thank you so much for reading and for such sweet, detailed feedback--I so appreciate it!

[sapphicwarrior]

this was totally awesome again! I prefer your take to this particular scene then the take Grey's did (Erica going to the parking lot of no-return...). This is how they could have solved it on the show, make Erica stay and not kick her out.
The image of Callie being on her knees in front of Erica, begging for forgiveness,I found that sad but somehow funny too when I imagined Callie doing that.

[hottielibrarian]

I know, I HATED Erica just walking to the parking lot. I can't think of a worse way to get rid of a storyline, how transparent. Sorry, i still hate ABC.
Yeah, Callie should have begged for forgiveness. She had a lot to apologize for, but I also thought it was kinda romantic too.
Thanks for reading!!

[punky_96]

Wow. What a great use of the song. I really liked how you went inside that scenario and took us through the pain, and brought us somewhere positive on the other side. I really felt for Erica and Callie both that Erica banished her. I felt that Erica was right to push Callie away, but could feel the pain of them both during their punishment. I’m not in comment mode yet today so I’ll just tell you some of my favorite lines…

“When had she become a girl who sniffed girls?”
“resigned to the seemingly inevitable demise of their never-started-love story”
“until Bailey scolded her for smearing Hahn's name”
“A bubble burst in Erica's chest”
“Erica wasn't hers to touch anymore”
“Say Anything-style!”

[hottielibrarian]

Cool, thanks! I'm glad both Erica and Callie's pain was evident. Erica didn't want to push Callie away, but at a certain point, she had to, even if it tortured her just as much as Callie. And I wanted Callie to really live with the loss of Erica and fight to win her back.
Thanks for telling me which lines stuck out--I'm always curious to hear what worked.
Thanks for reading and leaving such sweet feedback, even if you weren't in comment mode...

[vinjii]

This was wonderful, I don't even know where to start to tell you how wonderful it was. There were so many good lines I'd probably be quoting them all if I wanted to tell you which I loved most. But awwwww, at the whole never being over her. Sigh. Beautiful ♥

[hottielibrarian]

Awesome!! I'm so happy you liked it. No, I don't think these two could ever be over each other, you know? Thanks so much for the kind feedback!!

[nucleuspolposus]

Loved it!

[hottielibrarian]

awesome--thanks!