Bored. Invented a new poem.

[i_am_mad_hatter]

As many of you know, I have a tendency to call writing a poem "inventing".
I was bored in my room, so I started building this.  Take what you want from it, read it how you'd like, but there is a certain way to read it; I meant it to be read following adjacent stanzas always moving from top left to bottom right.  If you want you can read it different

Comments

[riles298]

I like reading it line by line, so you get "Proximal and distant;" and "But then you could care less to look but not touch,"

But I do see what you mean about inveting and building.

[i_am_mad_hatter]

thanks for the feedback miss, but I'm not quite sure what you mean by the first bit.

[jubee1]

i like reading across, like you would for a normal work of prose!
My favorite's are "eyes that screamed But you could care less to look but not touch," and "'don't leave me and I was left. to be reminded of you" and "alone. Alone. yet be denied your favor."

Mario, you are brilliant. And amazing. Amazing in the fact that you can turn this incredibly awful situation into something beautiful like this. :)

[i_am_mad_hatter]

Thanks, I'm glad you like it.

As for the whole awful situation thing, my original plan was to show how dangerously fluid human relationships can be. The problem became that a relationship that could flip flop between friendship and romance like the I wanted to show would have to be unstable. The only way I would be able to allow the six different story lines is if the relationship were a broken one.