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ihearttvsnark

All the Right Moves 9/10

Mar 17, 2012 18:56

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pairing: clark and lois, pairing: chloe and oliver, smallville, title: all the right moves, series: elm universe, fanfiction

Comments 26

spike2151 March 18 2012, 00:55:13 UTC

:(

Loved this chapter... but the last part was really sad...

I understand Chloe's reaction... she is just scared, and she really doesn't want to lose Oliver. And I really, really hope Oliver understands that too.

Throught all this story he has shown that she knows Chloe better than anyone, so I hope that in the back of his mind, he knows that she trusts him, that she just really cares for him and is scared for him... even if she chose a very weird way of telling him ... :)

When she was crying I felt really bad for her... It's not easy for her to see that she's pushing people away... people she cares about so much, and that she may have screw things up. I really hoped she would be able to talk to Ollie and tell him that.

And that last line: "She was too late" ... I really didn't like the sound of it, I hope it doesn't mean anything bad... I know you will fix this, right?

And I can't believe we have only one more chapter... :'(

ihearttvsnark March 19 2012, 13:21:16 UTC

Aw, thank you for the comments. I'm glad you're enjoying this despite this chapter being sad. Chloe is wise beyond her years in so many ways but when it comes to emotions and her heart, she has a very hard time seeing things clearly. Her reaction was all over the place and even she couldn't quite figure out why. But you're definitely right about Oliver and how well he knows her. Don't worry too much about the "too late" line, Chloe just wanted to catch Oliver before he left...as I said, have faith in Ollie.

danisige March 18 2012, 01:16:52 UTC

The chapter was very sad. The story is very beautiful, and they still have many things to balance. I hope they are able to understand each other and everything be fine. And the mission be a success.
I really hope they stay together. They love each other very much, it's so clear, even in the AU.
Chlo-Lo is always great, I always loved their friendship.:)
The reunion was perfect. :D
Good chapter. :)

ihearttvsnark March 19 2012, 13:22:55 UTC

Thank you! This chapter was sad for me to write too and that's exactly it. Life is messy so it wouldn't be very realistic for everything to just be perfect for the rest of their lives. They're both still very new at the relationship thing. I'm glad you enjoyed Chlo-Lo too. :)

insanityclings March 18 2012, 01:45:14 UTC

Oh wow this chapter was so sad. I'm sure you'll find a way to fix everything but I'm so sad that Oliver left thinking she didn't believe in him when it was just her fears and insecurities talking. I really liked the way Lois and Chloe finally talked about their relationships, though. I can't wait for the next chapter, even though I'm sad that the fic is coming to an end, because I know it will be a great ending to a wonderful story.

ihearttvsnark March 19 2012, 13:24:48 UTC

Thanks! Don't worry too much...Ollie has grown a lot and he's not one to give up without a fight. Aw, I'm glad you enjoyed Chlo-Lo. It was definitely time for them to have a talk. Again, don't be too sad. This story is almost done but there's another one coming in this universe. ;)

sxymami0909 March 18 2012, 02:18:29 UTC

Thing chapter was really awesome, M. I liked how everyone on the team is comfortable in the command center now and how they all spend time together. I like that Oliver's contractors finished everything up and he made it all pretty for her but still made stuff for the guys to come hang out.

I think you did a great job with the interaction between Victor and Chloe and I can totally understand why she was upset. She's worried about him and she doesn't even realize it. Also I can see her being upset because of the fact that he wasn't the one to tell her. Poor Chollie. :/

Yay for sexytimes and OMG the morning after fight not cool, M! D: They are both so stupid. Chloe just tell him your scared and Ollie read between the lines! Jeez you two are killing me LOL but it was very in character for both them and I always love that about your writing.

The Chlo Lo part was perfect. I love the revelation that Lois knew they knew. Friends episode anyone? JKJK, But yeah I really enjoyed that part and I felt bad for both of them and wanted to hug ( ... )

ihearttvsnark March 19 2012, 13:29:16 UTC

Thanks, C! Yes, exactly. She was worried but she couldn't quite deduce that for herself. I'm glad you could see that because I wasn't sure it was coming across when I was writing it. Hahahaha. They are both a little stupid.

Hahaha. Of course she knew but they didn't know that she knew. Lois just wanted something that was just theirs and Chloe knew that which is why she never said anything until she was too emotional to be rational. I'm glad you enjoyed their talk.

You know I love being evil. But you won't have to wait too long for the last chapter and you know I'm not just going to be like, "yeah, Chlollie? Over."

Thanks for the comments and for pre-reading. ♥

greenteam4ever March 18 2012, 09:12:16 UTC

Oh my..I can't even have the proper words to describe my feelings. I think Chloe's worry has been projected on me. I understand her feelings and I'm so glad Lois was there to help her admit that she'd been wrong. But...she was too late and I really hope she'll be able to get through to Oliver.
Thanks for updating, great chapter as always! Your writing just makes me so emotional :) And it's definitely a good thing, cos I'm not great in showing my emotions or even at being emotional at all ;)

ihearttvsnark March 19 2012, 14:51:05 UTC

Aw, thank you. This sounds weird, but I'm glad it makes you emotional. That's a really nice compliment. I'm happy you understood where Chloe was coming from and why it was so hard for her to just admit what she was feeling. But don't worry too much. All hope is definitely not lost despite what she thinks. ;)